1. Posted: May 29, 2018In:

    Haunted by his past, a careworn man fights against starvation and a hostile environment to find a new home for a little girl and himself in a post apocalyptic world, which not only questions his purpose in life, but if hope alone can keep you and the ?Mensch? inside you alive.

    dpg Singularity

    Better. But... "Careworn" seems extraneous.? He's a survivor in? a post apocalyptic world -- it goes without saying he's "careworn".? (Who in that world isn't?) And what's the story hook?? What differentiates this from other films about post apocalyptic odysseys?? What unique twist do you have, whatRead more

    Better.

    But…

    “Careworn” seems extraneous.? He’s a survivor in? a post apocalyptic world — it goes without saying he’s “careworn”.? (Who in that world isn’t?)

    And what’s the story hook?? What differentiates this from other films about post apocalyptic odysseys?? What unique twist do you have, what new thematic territory does your story cover that hasn’t already been covered in films like “Cargo” and “The Road”?

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  2. Posted: May 27, 2018In:

    A schizophrenic young woman lives in constant suspicion of her life being surveilled and manipulated. A seemingly endless witch hunt for the truth takes place as she can’t seem to trust anyone.

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    Richiev Singularity

    "When the police don't believe someone is out to get her, a schizophrenic woman is determined to discover who or what is hiding inside her old Victorian home."

    “When the police don’t believe someone is out to get her, a schizophrenic woman is determined to discover who or what is hiding inside her old Victorian home.”

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  3. Posted: April 20, 2018In:

    After 15years of running and keeping it a secret, a woman is forced to face her abuser when the love of her life leaves her. Will she be able to, to save her relationship?

    Absinthe Head Penpusher

    I don't know anything about what you are writing, so this is just an attempt at a re-write of your logline. Apologies if it is horrible. After 15 years on the run, a woman must come out of hiding and face up to her abuser in order to save her relationship with the love of her life and become whole aRead more

    I don’t know anything about what you are writing, so this is just an attempt at a re-write of your logline. Apologies if it is horrible.

    After 15 years on the run, a woman must come out of hiding and face up to her abuser in order to save her relationship with the love of her life and become whole again.

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