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Posted: July 20, 2018In: Drama

After a suicidal client in a rough part of town steals euthanasia drugs, a house-call vet must keep him talking until the police arrive.

Mike Pedley Singularity

Added an answer on July 20, 2018 at 4:57 pm

Is the fact that he's in a rough part of town relevant? If so, clarify. If not, remove. When you say 'client' do you mean the vet's client? There's a pet somewhere then. Surely the police would be there in a few minutes so, as dpg said, there doesn't seem to be enough for a feature. You need to makeRead more

Is the fact that he’s in a rough part of town relevant? If so, clarify. If not, remove. When you say ‘client’ do you mean the vet’s client? There’s a pet somewhere then. Surely the police would be there in a few minutes so, as dpg said, there doesn’t seem to be enough for a feature. You need to make us care for both the client and the vet so that we care whether the guy kills himself. Currently, there’s nothing to suggest why we should.

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Posted: July 16, 2018In: Drama

After nearly dying of a heart attack, a morbidly obese junk-food addict gives herself a year to get in shape to finish the London marathon.

dpg Singularity

Added an answer on July 18, 2018 at 8:26 am

After nearly dying of a heart attack, a morbidly obese food junkie gives herself one year to get in shape to run the London marathon. (25 words) I see no need to insert the trainer "B" story into the logline.? It's a natural subplot, but the? main plot isn't about the relationship -- it's about theRead more

After nearly dying of a heart attack, a morbidly obese food junkie gives herself one year to get in shape to run the London marathon.
(25 words)

I see no need to insert the trainer “B” story into the logline.? It’s a natural subplot, but the? main plot isn’t about the relationship — it’s about the struggle to? be able to run the marathon.

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