1. Posted: July 11, 2019In:

    When Maggie, a starry-eyed wallflower lands the dueling lead roles in a theatre production of both Sophocles “Antigone” and Euripides “Medea”, not only must she bravely step out of the chorus line Thespis but she must boldly step out of her own shell.

    dpg Singularity

    Okay, but she still "had to come out of her shell" to audition, right?? And she beat out her rivals -- in the first Act,.? So... mission accomplished?? What else is there for her to overcome, to struggle for?? She got the leads. And by overcome and struggling I refer to an objective goal.? ?"ComingRead more

    Okay, but she still “had to come out of her shell” to audition, right?? And she beat out her rivals — in the first Act,.? So… mission accomplished?? What else is there for her to overcome, to struggle for?? She got the leads.

    And by overcome and struggling I refer to an objective goal.? ?”Coming out her shell” is a general phrase relating to her internal subjective issue.? And that is important element in drama; that is what must be resolved in order to achieve an objective goal.

    But a logline is a statement of an objective goal that must be achieved — not the subjective problem that must be overcome.? So she must come out of her shell in order to accomplish what objective goal?? (And what are the stakes?)

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  2. Posted: July 10, 2019In:

    A young closeted Asian man decides to lose his virginity, to a stranger that he meets online.

    dpg Singularity

    As the others have said.? Obviously, it's a risky venture? on his part.? Anything and everything could go wrong. I suggest as an additional complication, he's? under a lot of pressure from his family to marry, have kids.

    As the others have said.? Obviously, it’s a risky venture? on his part.? Anything and everything could go wrong. I suggest as an additional complication, he’s? under a lot of pressure from his family to marry, have kids.

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  3. Posted: July 10, 2019In:

    Recovering from his suicide attempt, a famous techno artist regains his passion for music as he falls in love with a transsexual woman painter with internalized transphobia, for whom he will sacrifice his popularity for her to realize her worth.

    Richiev Singularity

    I'm not quite sure of the connection between helping someone overcome their transphobia and giving up their popularity. If the lead character gives up his popularity, the painter would still be transphobic. (Obviously there a piece of the story missing that bridges this gap and would probably be impRead more

    I’m not quite sure of the connection between helping someone overcome their transphobia and giving up their popularity.

    If the lead character gives up his popularity, the painter would still be transphobic.

    (Obviously there a piece of the story missing that bridges this gap and would probably be important to the logline)

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