1. Posted: September 4, 2022In:

    After having a fallout with her bandmates, a pop singer leaves and becomes a solo artist in her own right.

    Joie9 Penpusher

    A bit wordy and confusing sentence structure and needs to address the conflict a bit more. Good premise tho

    A bit wordy and confusing sentence structure and needs to address the conflict a bit more. Good premise tho

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  2. Posted: September 2, 2022In:

    After being fired from drinking on the job, a disc jockey teams up with a party planner to help him get sober and to help him with next gig.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi tony18, An alcoholic DJ who has lost his last gig asks a party planner to help him sober up and get his life under control. Is this what you are trying to say in your logline? Whether your answer is yes or no, click on the "FORMULA" icon at the top of this page and study the content a few times.Read more

    Hi tony18,

    An alcoholic DJ who has lost his last gig asks a party planner to help him sober up and get his life under control.

    Is this what you are trying to say in your logline? Whether your answer is yes or no, click on the “FORMULA” icon at the top of this page and study the content a few times. This will help you in constructing your loglines.

    Good Luck

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  3. Posted: July 22, 2022In:

    THE INCREDIBLY, ALMOST MADE UP TRUE STORY OF THORTON T. THORTON The wealthy owner of a television network creates a show so offensive it results in a global backlash by America and its allies who will do anything to prevent the airing of the network’s lastest sitcom– which takes place in a Nazi concentration camp.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi pickerman123, How about: A deep delve into THORTON T's television network and its most offensive tv show. I hope this helps

    Hi pickerman123,
    How about:
    A deep delve into THORTON T’s television network and its most offensive tv show.

    I hope this helps

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