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Comedic Drama Tv series: When a Nigerian foreign exchange student moves in with a white suburban, American family, cultural differences and close minded town ideals turns the once home, into a house of unrelated individuals
Good start.Black-white feels old and soft. Is there more to it?? Assuming it's America, is there any thought of an Arab or Mexican student?Can't imagine the parents letting it get so far, they'd end the exchange agreement and arrange for another family to take him, no? It's not like an adopted childRead more
Good start.
Black-white feels old and soft. Is there more to it?? Assuming it’s America, is there any thought of an Arab or Mexican student?
Can’t imagine the parents letting it get so far, they’d end the exchange agreement and arrange for another family to take him, no? It’s not like an adopted child.
Add a paragraph to mention the key characters and their situations.
Is this a one-hour show or half hour? If the latter, any thought about the format…single-camera or multi? This will help with the mental picture and tone.
See less(REVISED) When the royal lookalike he’s babysitting turns out to be the real Queen Elizabeth, a low-level ceremonial guard must assume the highest responsibility in the land when European Terrorists take over Buckingham Palace.
Cute.? The lookalike part sounds like a detail for the script. For the logline, the hook is this lowly guy having to protect the queen. Or clarify how the lookalike part matters beyond the setup.
Cute.? The lookalike part sounds like a detail for the script. For the logline, the hook is this lowly guy having to protect the queen. Or clarify how the lookalike part matters beyond the setup.
See lessA cheerless workaholic?s attempt to mercy kill her ailing grandfather goes spectacularly wrong when his easygoing caregiver Kyle takes the euthanasia pill instead. Overwhelmed with guilt, Joy dives down a rabbit-hole in New York City on a 24-hour quest for a cure while also giving Kyle the best last day of his life (just in case!).
That's a fresh premise!>> A cheerless workaholic?sWith the predicament she gets into, it's hard to see what these two flaws add to the story. One flaw for the logline is usually enough, though sometimes there is no significant flaw and it's more about the innocent (or innocent-ish) protag dealRead more
That’s a fresh premise!
>> A cheerless workaholic?s
With the predicament she gets into, it’s hard to see what these two flaws add to the story. One flaw for the logline is usually enough, though sometimes there is no significant flaw and it’s more about the innocent (or innocent-ish) protag dealing with the issue.
>> to mercy kill her ailing grandfather
Consider that he pressures her to do it or there’s some other mixup with the same result. Even for a comedy, I’m not sure I’d care for the protag otherwise.
>> goes spectacularly wrong
Redundant, the action conveys this.
>> Kyle…Joy
Cut the names.
>> dives down a rabbit-hole
Seems to say make-believe is involved. Is that the case? If yes, clarify. If no, cut as it would be redundant with a clearer A Story.
>> on a 24-hour quest for a cure while also giving Kyle the best last day of his life (just in case!).
Hard to see how both are active and simultaneous objectives. Is one more of the A Story?
By shortening other parts, there would be room to clarify the cure quest, if that’s the A Story. Does she have to go to a particular place? Is she seeking a particular person or ingredient? What is the conflict in trying to achieve something like this?
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