1. Posted: August 24, 2016In:

    A girl trifles with the dark arts during her mother’s career defining moment.

    [Deleted User]

    Again, I posted a rewrite on one of your other revisions. Check it out and use it as a starting point. Hope it helps.

    Again, I posted a rewrite on one of your other revisions. Check it out and use it as a starting point. Hope it helps.

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  2. Posted: August 26, 2016In:

    After a newly engaged woman realizes she has no friends to invite to her wedding, she sets out to make some adult friendships while balancing a crappy job and her own awkwardness.

    [Deleted User]

    All points have been made that I could mate, they even made one last year called?The Wedding Ringer?with Kevin Hart last year which also follows a similar premise. You definitely need to tell us your hook, what made you interested in this movie and made you HAVE to write this logline down. Hope thisRead more

    All points have been made that I could mate, they even made one last year called?The Wedding Ringer?with Kevin Hart last year which also follows a similar premise. You definitely need to tell us your hook, what made you interested in this movie and made you HAVE to write this logline down. Hope this helps.

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  3. Posted: August 25, 2016In:

    [Revised] A manipulative cat uses trickery and the dark arts to exact revenge upon an unappreciative mother, disrupting her big presentation.

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    Everyone above has made great points so I'll help you out with a quick rewrite to get you on your way:When her mother turns her into a cat as a punishment, a supernatural girl tries to exact revenge on her while adapting to her new body.?Hope this helps.?

    Everyone above has made great points so I’ll help you out with a quick rewrite to get you on your way:

    When her mother turns her into a cat as a punishment, a supernatural girl tries to exact revenge on her while adapting to her new body.?

    Hope this helps.?

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