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  1. Posted: April 22, 2017In: Comedy

    EVERYTHING I KNOW ABOUT WOODY ALLEN AND A FEW THINGS I MADE UP – A nebbish Indian boy convinced he’s telepathically linked to Woody Allen learns critical life lessons from colorful characters when he embarks on an adventure to find Woody in NY

    Dkpough1 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on April 23, 2017 at 1:52 am

    Fma: There is a difference between hooking someone on your story and being completely vague. A hook is something that raises interest, whether it's a twist on a well-trod trope, a cool new idea, or something. Simply being vague and withholding information is something completely different. Sure, NirRead more

    Fma:

    There is a difference between hooking someone on your story and being completely vague. A hook is something that raises interest, whether it’s a twist on a well-trod trope, a cool new idea, or something. Simply being vague and withholding information is something completely different. Sure, Nir Shelter asked for more information, but that’s because a logline is used to sell a concept to someone who with more money than you to make it into a film. They don’t want to take a risk on something that’s vague and they don’t know what they’re buying.

    Now, on your actual logline, I don’t see a strong hook. Maybe you’re trying to use Woody Allen as a hook, but for me, as someone who doesn’t really watch comedy often, there’s nothing here that makes me think this is even particularly funny. What events actually take place on screen? I don’t know, and a producer wouldn’t either.

    For an example, let’s look at Groundhog Day. The hook of that story is a(at the time) unique situation used to create comedy and drama, which is a man reliving the same day over and over. More recently, Edge of Tomorrow used the same hook, and in a nutshell it’s “Groundhog Day with aliens.(and Tom Cruise and Emily Blunt)” That’s a hook, something people want to see.

    So basically, in response to your comment to Nir Shelter: yes, the audience for a logline, a tool used to sell a concept, would like to know. And no, they would not be hooked, would not be rushing to make this because they would be too busy asking questions to clarify.
    As others have pointed out, you’ve posted many loglines with similar problems and don’t seem to take suggestions or focus on any one premise to improve it. So I suggest you focus on a single logline and premise using feedback you’ve received.

    I hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: March 2, 2017In: Comedy

    One of the last hair metal bands in America must battle changing musical trends and a shadowy corporate adversary on their quest to reach L.A. and rock n roll stardom.

    Fma Samurai
    Added an answer on April 20, 2017 at 6:15 am

    THE HARDER THEY FALL - After the Seattle grunge scene takes over and a lauded hair metal band loses relevancy overnight, the cocaine fueled-narcissistic lead singer engages in a publicity stunt that lands him in jail where he turns his life around with the help of a mysterious reformed murderer.

    THE HARDER THEY FALL –
    After the Seattle grunge scene takes over and a lauded hair metal band loses relevancy overnight, the cocaine fueled-narcissistic lead singer engages in a publicity stunt that lands him in jail where he turns his life around with the help of a mysterious reformed murderer.

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  3. Posted: April 15, 2017In: Comedy

    WHO FEELS IT KNOWS IT – A couple of high schoolers spend their 4 days of Senior Trip to Jamaica looking for the ghost of Bob Marley.

    Neer Shelter Singularity
    Added an answer on April 18, 2017 at 12:23 pm

    Agreed with the above. Their motivations are not clear, what was the inciting incident that made them need to find the ghost?

    Agreed with the above.

    Their motivations are not clear, what was the inciting incident that made them need to find the ghost?

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