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Penpusher · 66 points

234 points to Logliner

on A rich, successful doctor with a debilitating sex addiction becomes entangled in kinky and increasingly dangerous power games with his sexy psychiatrist.

This gets my attention and sounds interesting for a movie concept. According to the rules of writing loglines that I see posted on here though, there is no inciting element listed. I guess there needs to be some kind of…
on A crazy caveman from a forest tribe accidentally ends up in 18th century London, he must find a way to get back home before he becomes an exhibit at the museum of history.

I'm not good at this because I've just started, but I think first, the "crazy" caveman throws me. What defines a crazy caveman? My next thought is that this sounds like something I have seen before.? I think there needs…
on When a struggling video game designer begins seeing his characters in real life, he suspects he?s already playing a game of his own creation and begins searching for patterns to help complete and escape the game.

I am new at this so if this isn't very clear, I'm sorry. I think your concept is really interesting, but I think your logline is wordy. I think you can phrase it a lot more succinctly.