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After their house mysteriously burns down, killing their friend, two potheads start selling weed in present day Indiana to make ends meet, only find their supplier is a psychopath.
Hi Skieege, Making ends meet is generic. Try and find the unique goal of your story and highlight it. Why is the supplier a psychopath? Hope this helps :)
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Derek Caplin is a nobody. He spends his whole life as a nobody, but he is going to change that. Fleeing to the past, he alters his past self for what he believes is the better, however, when he returns to the future he sees his last self has grown up to be a warlord. With the World on a tipping point, Derek must turn to those who originally tried to stop him for help.
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Derek Chaplin tries to alter his past to give himself a second chance, but when he sees the future his 'new self' will create he must now stop at nothing to stop a horrible, deadly future from ever happening.
Hi Knightrider1984, There is a great section on the site that will help you with writing a logline: https://staging.loglineit.com/howto/ Once you deconstruct the story elements into it's most basic form, you will then find it easier to work with and…
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When the nation of Japan researches the cause of it's constant tsunamis — it awakens Godzilla, deep in the Pacific, who arises and establishes an authoritarian rule over it's country as it's citizens build it a throne and serve it as their God leading to a cult-like religious following and the third world war with catastrophic nuclear consequences.
Hi Caleb, Godzilla is a registered character and I would suggest creating you own kaiju for the purpose of the story. If the Godzilla character could communicate, I would suggest using it in the logline. "Awoken from the depths of…
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Young William Randolph Hearst goes to war against an ageing Joseph Pulitzer as each tries to monopolize coverage of a mysterious homicide capturing New York?s imagination, birthing the modern concept of sensationalist media coverage.
PROS - A unique story. - Clear goal. CONS - Passive protagonist elements. The real story would be better perceived from the murderer's P.O.V. - High budget/period piece. With a few more re-writes, the writer could have addressed the underlying…
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Following the outbreak of a virus that wipes out the majority of the human population, a teen documents her family?s new life in quarantine and tries to protect her infected sister.
PROS - Strong visual event. - Impending confrontation with close relationship. CONS - Doesn't clearly specify use of found footage element. - Lack of specific goal other than to survive. The writer demonstrates an innate ability to deliver the story…
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When a village is plagued by beetles that eat colour, an artist grieving the loss of his daughter ventures into the nearby jungle to save a flower which is the only source of a certain shade of blue.
I love this dude, well done. I hope one day I can see this.
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When a single father to a teenage daughter learns that he has a fatal brain tumor, he takes her on a road trip to find the mother who abandoned her years before and to try to teach her everything she might need over the rest of her life.
Heysa everyone! Just so you understand, the logline is an example taken from "The Black List" which you can find over at http://blcklst.com/. It's a useful tool to compare what you are writing to what is selling/hot.
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After moving into a new apartment, a famous writer sets up various cameras to spy on his strange neighbour.
Heysa everyone, Thanks for the feedback it has been really helpful. :D
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After moving into a new apartment, a famous writer sets up various cameras to spy on his strange neighbour.
Like "The Blair Witch Project", "Paranormal Activity" and "Chronicle".
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After moving into a new apartment, a famous writer sets up various cameras to spy on his strange neighbour.
Its a found footage take on those movies and is included in the logline "... sets up various cameras...".
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A determined boy separated from his newfound sweetheart must cross the Bass Strait and come to the rescue before Tasmania is destroyed by rising sea levels.
"Drifting further apart, a boy scared of drowning sets sail to rescue his childhood sweetheart from rising sea levels that threaten her home."
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When a soldier returns from an overseas deployment and finds that the family home has completely vanished, he sets out to find his home and to discover who he really is.
It is also a story concept from "Save the Cat".
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With an uncanny ability to foresee death while painting, an artist’s prediction forces him to abandon his true love in order to save her.
Driven to the verge of insanity, a (weakness) artist fights to win back the love of his life after predicting her death.?
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When a ex- government operative's family is attacked, he vowes to fight world war z, but when a cure can't be found, he must risk death to deliver and save the world..
"To protect his family from a zombie apocalypse, a United Nations ambassador must race around the world to find a cure."
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When a lost miner, finds a portal to the future, he is forced to question his fate, but when a relentess pack of pirates attack him he has one attempt to escape.
"When a treasure hunter discovers an underwater cave to the past, he must escape the clutches of an evil ghost ship and its crew before a volcano eruption seals his fate in the age of piracy forever."
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When a frightened pharmacutical lab tester is tricked into mind control, he has 2000 hours to save and his family who remain trapped in a time continum before his medication runs out and he perishes.
"Trapped inside a decaying time loop, a naive technician must enter his own mind before a paradox destroys the family he has always wanted." -- Time Heals All Wounds (Alt title)
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A strange parallelepipoid of darkness causes the dawn of humanity then much later its access to a higher level of consciousness
The best way when reverse engineering a logline is to look at its IMDb profile: "Humanity finds a mysterious, obviously artificial, object buried deep beneath the lunar surface and, with the intelligent computer H.A.L. 9000, sets off on a quest."…
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After his father gives him a job at their small-town newspaper, a conceited journalist buried in debt investigates a sports drug scandal that implicates his athlete brother.
Awesome rewrite :D !! You nailed the father aspect.
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Desperate for his father?s approval, a conceited journalist takes a job at his small town newspaper. But when he discovers a drug scandal brewing within the local football club, he pursues the story even though it will implicate his athlete brother.
Your feedback is mindless stupidity at it's worst and the blatant attack towards me is laughable. Best case scenario: READ "Save The Cat!".
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"An 86 year old man relives his past lives through hypnotic regression, but in one fateful session, a blurry vision shows him his possible next life and that his current one is about to end soon and the strange man from an unknown agency has to make the toughest moral decision."
Firstly, I didn't say they were the protagonist, their actions make your protagonist act passively. Secondly, You may think it clever but your questions are irrelevant, both at the start and end. Thirdly, what else would we be assuming? It's…
