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When a rogue cop is trying to keep his actions unnoticed, due to the killers that he cause.
doesn't really make sense, killers cause what? a bit short, maybe you could have added more to make it a bit clearer.
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A Production Teacher's goal is for his students to appear on time and start filming in Bondi Junction. The students complete there work, after a crazy woman appears and plans to sew him for no reason, the Production Teacher filled with rage loses his Temper
sounds like a true story. This sounds like a scene not a movie.
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A worldwide hero and modern prophet is faced with losing everything as a stronger hero rises. He is now forced to defend his title to stay on top of the world that he controls.
should it be a stronger villain that is rising to give a stronger protagonist. A stronger hero means that hes really a good guy doesn't it? does he cause destruction to the world trying to defend his title?
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A mentally troubled banker from Chicago finds himself hard to go by everyday due to his traumatic past, he manages the people who made him who he is now which leads him into a plot to sabotage there financial lives and turn his without being notice by the bank, the victim and overcoming his own greed.
good story but the logline is really 2 sentences because its so long. It sounds like he is the protagonist as he is the one that wants to bring everyone down. Was that done on purpose, or is he bringing…
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When a film excursion in the woods turn deadly, Sally must learn to work with her classmates in order for her to survive the horrifying massacre
so why does Sally need to work with her classmates, was she socially awkward/ inept before the excursion? Are there two obstacles that Sally needs to overcome for this movie?
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From professional football player to professional coach he leads the top team to victory and breaks multimillion dollar contracts a long the way.
what is the goal of the story? is it to lead the team to victory? it isn't clear what the stakes that the coach will face
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Olivia, 25, a pothead, decides to hitchike from her home in Sydney to Cairns via the A1 coastal highway to see her estranged mother after her father fires her from his restaurant hoping she'll do something more with her life and quit cannabis.
what stakes are there in the story?
