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on A private investigator and hunter of supernatural creatures is searching for a missing twenty-year-old woman when he stumbles upon a vampire coven with plans to enslave humanity.

I am having trouble with the first part, specifically (i.e. "A private investigator and hunter of supernatural creatures"). I'm not sure it makes sense as it is now. Any help would be greatly appreciated.
on On the verge of striking it rich an intergalactic diamond huntress is summoned to earth for compulsory breeding, but she is kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route and must fight for her freedom to make it home before she is sentenced to death.

Why is she being sentenced to death? I think cleaning this logline up would help greatly. Something like "An intergalactic diamond huntress kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route to Earth, must fight for her freedom in order to make…