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A hitman finds himself sharing a booth in a small town diner with the mobster who hired him and his proposed victim. The killer takes a liking to his target and turns down the job, which doesn?t sit well with his employer. That?s when the guns come out and he has to do some fast talking before things turn deadly.

December 9, 2015
Things get dicey when a hitman finds himself sitting with the man who hired him and his proposed victim at a small town diner.

December 9, 2015
A military school cadet must be silenced when she witnesses Cuban-Americans robbing the school?s armory. When she discovers that the guns are to be used to assassinate the president, she has only minutes to stop the killers.

February 12, 2015
The first female cadet at Norton Military Institute knew plebe year would be a challenge, but she never figured it would include surviving a kidnapping during which she?s very nearly murdered and then putting her life on the line to thwart an assassination plot by Cuban-Americans outraged by the President?s initiative to normalize relations with Cuba.

February 11, 2015
Plebe year just got worse for two military college cadets who stumble upon a plot by Cuban Americans to assassinate the President in retaliation for his normalizing relations with Cuba. It isn?t until minutes before the killing is to begin that the cadets discover what?s happening and race to stop the assassins? plan from succeeding.

January 15, 2015
Without knowing it, two military college cadets stumble upon a plot by deranged Cuban Americans to assassinate the President in retaliation for his normalizing relations with Cuba. It isn?t until minutes before the plan is about to be put into action that the cadets discover what?s happening and race to stop the assassins? plan from succeeding.

January 13, 2015
A ruthlessly ambitious farmboy connives his way to the top of the Oklahoma oil business during its early boom days. In the end, after years of backstabbing and dirty dealings, he must fight the enemies earned over a lifetime to hang on to his empire.

November 13, 2014
An ambitious and completely unscrupulous young man uses his guts and his guile to become one of the biggest oilmen in Oklahoma. In the end, after years of backstabbing and dirty dealings, he must fight the enemies earned over a lifetime to hang on to his empire.

November 13, 2014
Los Angeles, 1956. An ambitious prosecutor wants to know why the police were so eager to close the file on the suspicious death of a wealthy businessman. When his off the books investigation uncovers a link between that case and the murder of a young prostitute twenty years earlier, both his career and his life are endangered.

October 21, 2014
Los Angeles, 1956. An ambitious prosecutor's investigation into the suspicious death of a wealthy businessman uncovers the murder of a young prostitute twenty years earlier. His suspects in both crimes: the mother of the girl he loves and his father, the Chief of the LAPD.

October 18, 2014

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on An ambitious and completely unscrupulous young man uses his guts and his guile to become one of the biggest oilmen in Oklahoma. In the end, after years of backstabbing and dirty dealings, he must fight the enemies earned over a lifetime to hang on to his empire.

Gilgamesh and Nir Shelter, thanks for taking the time to crit my logline. The story is mostly about the MC's rise to the top, but that serves to set up the battle in the end. Good idea re: being more…
on A ruthlessly ambitious farmboy connives his way to the top of the Oklahoma oil business during its early boom days. In the end, after years of backstabbing and dirty dealings, he must fight the enemies earned over a lifetime to hang on to his empire.

I just noticed that I used "it's" instead of "its". My bad. I can't figure out how to correct it.
on Los Angeles, 1956. An ambitious prosecutor wants to know why the police were so eager to close the file on the suspicious death of a wealthy businessman. When his off the books investigation uncovers a link between that case and the murder of a young prostitute twenty years earlier, both his career and his life are endangered.

I might be able to move it back to the late 1940's. I think I'd lose the flavor of what I want in the story if I went backward or forward too much. Thanks for the info about the LAPD.
on Los Angeles, 1956. An ambitious prosecutor wants to know why the police were so eager to close the file on the suspicious death of a wealthy businessman. When his off the books investigation uncovers a link between that case and the murder of a young prostitute twenty years earlier, both his career and his life are endangered.

Thanks for taking the time to crit my logline. All of the issues you mention are addressed in the script, but, unfortunately, I didn't have room to include them in my logline. The prosecutor, Dev Stone, is about to try…
on Los Angeles, 1956. An ambitious prosecutor's investigation into the suspicious death of a wealthy businessman uncovers the murder of a young prostitute twenty years earlier. His suspects in both crimes: the mother of the girl he loves and his father, the Chief of the LAPD.

I just wrote a reply to this, but I'm not sure it posted, so I'll try it again. Thanks for the crit, dpg. It's funny you should bring up the roles of prosecutor vis a vie the police. I have…