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on After Alexander The Great’s death, one of his generals seizes Egypt, fights to restore it into a mighty empire, and eventually becomes Pharoah, founding a dynasty of kings, queens, and gods.

Thanks for your perspectives. I'm not convinced enough people know who Ptolemy was and even if they've heard of the name they may think we was an astronomer! I agree with your other comments - need to find a way…
on A shell shocked soldier in post-invasion Europe has to decide between taking vengeance on the invaders or saving a group of forgotten teenagers after he’s been wounded attempting to destroy the source of the invaders power.

The last phrase "after he's been wounded.." sounds like it's been tagged on and continues the sentence a bit too much for my taste. Not sure if this was intended but I'm uncertain about whether to expect a WW2 movie…