Steeldownunder

21 points

279 points to Logliner

3 loglines
2 reviews

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When she discovers her boss has embezzled millions, a pyrophobic novice realtor frantically searches for the smoking gun that will put him away, however when he hires a problematic hitman to silence her, the ticking time bomb threatens to destroy everyone.

January 10, 2021
When a persistent novice realtor discovers her condescending boss is bankrolling his fancy lifestyle using client escrow funds, she hires an investigator to dig deeper, but he catches on and hires a hit-man to silence her.

July 19, 2020
A righteous but gullible whistle-blower must obtain evidence her intimidating boss is a murderous monster before he catches on and takes sadistic steps to silence her for good.

July 12, 2020

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on When a persistent novice realtor discovers her condescending boss is bankrolling his fancy lifestyle using client escrow funds, she hires an investigator to dig deeper, but he catches on and hires a hit-man to silence her.

Hi Richiev, Nicely done, that's a great way to look at it. I had not thought of that angle; it works! thank you! 'Steeldownunder
on A righteous but gullible whistle-blower must obtain evidence her intimidating boss is a murderous monster before he catches on and takes sadistic steps to silence her for good.

Hello Darkhorse, thanks for your insightful feedback. I am going to revise my longline, it seems I have used my intended mid point rather than the inciting incident for my longline. Perhaps this novice realtor discovers her boss's fancy lifestyle…