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Envious of the positive attention his new coworker receives from his colleagues and love interest , an arrogant, lazy (no work ethic, shortcuts) cheater male enrolls in a planned office marathon in order to get recognition from his office crush
Love the concept and logline! What is the event that prompts the main character to put in all this work to impress his love interest? Why now? Can you add something that is last drop when it comes to his…
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When rather foolishly getting scammed and losing all her money, a rebellious teenage girl looking for independence from her controlling mother must team up with an elderly psychopathic bus driver in order to track down the ones who stole her money before it’s too late.
Nice logline, I like it. Perhaps you could rephrase "rather foolishly" and maybe bake it into the description of the character, something like "a rebellious but naive teenage girl". Just a suggestion. I like that there are stakes and a…
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When his untimely death traps his soul in an afterlife limbo, a distracted jazz musician must find his way back to earth in time to play his dream gig.
I like this!
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When he reincarnates as himself in Stockholm 2021, August Strindberg realizes he has to learn screenwriting at Story on Gotland to make a living -and there, falling in love with his classmate Siri – a happily married liberated feminist that mocks him for his fossil values and ideas, must revaluate himself and his view upon the world.
Hahaha, amazing!
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When uncovering the magical formula to more sales, a greedy telemarketer pursues to climb the capitalist ladder to upgrade his life-situation and impress his girlfriend.
Nice work! I'm not sure if "upgrade his life situation" is needed? Maybe just "a greedy telemarketer starts climbing the cpitalist ladder to impress his girlfriend". I haven't seen this movie, but now I want to, because LaKieth.
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When a lethal alien is brought on board a spaceship by accident, the crew has to fight for their survival in order to escape
In space no one can hear you in space. Jokes aside, nice logline! I'm thinking to tighten it, maybe you could write "when a lethal alien is found onboard a spaceship" instead? Also, is no one the main character, do…
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When her sister runs away after accidentally putting their kingdom in eternal winter with her magical powers, a princess has to team up with a rugged mountain man to find her sister and stop winter.
Good idea :)
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When a woman with abandonment issues gets dumped, she drags her pregnant bestie on a roadtrip, attempting to find love again. Halfway there, she learns she too is pregnant. She considers keeping the baby, so as to never be alone again. Forced to deliver her friend’s baby in the car, she realizes her need is not a baby, but the love that has always been in their friendship.
That's a good point, thank you!
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When a woman with abandonment issues gets dumped, she drags her pregnant bestie on a roadtrip, attempting to find love again. Halfway there, she learns she too is pregnant. She considers keeping the baby, so as to never be alone again. Forced to deliver her friend’s baby in the car, she realizes her need is not a baby, but the love that has always been in their friendship.
Thank you so much Odie, that's great! I was struggling to keep it short, but you really caught the essence in just one sentence. Really appreciate it!
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A young woman, whose boxing brother has been violent towards her all her life, decides to finally overcome her inner fear and learn how to box so that she can defeat him once and for all.
Hi, Thank you for this well thought out feedback. You're right, the coach character would take up a considerable amount of screen time. I hadn't thought much about their relationship, but I will think on it. Thanks again!
