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?A young mother?s life descends into chaos, when her husband talks her into helping him complete a job, as a contract killer, assassinating drug dealers, in the Philippines, but when a job goes wrong, and as a result, her husband is killed, and her children kidnapped, she will stop at nothing to meet revenge and save her kids.? ? SHABU by Judah Ray ?
It seems the logline is not, at all, portraying the story for what it is. Here is the synopsis, in hopes it clears up the story, and help people understand the logline I am trying to achieve.SHABUSynopsis:Aimee is a young…
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?When a man realizes the creatures, he?s been convinced his whole life weren?t real, are actually trying to take over the world, will he turn against what end up being his own kind, or save his new love, and the rest of the human race?? ? UNKNOWN POWER by Judah Ray ?
It doesn?t tell what the inciting incident is. The child has visions. It doesn?t tell what the objective goal of the main character is. The objective is to define the human race; I.E., us. It doesn?t tell what?s at stake,…
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?After she’s attacked by demons, a teenage amnesiac must discover who or what she is, if she?s to defeat the evil horde that has targeted her.?
— Fallen Angel–
I really like this idea. It can go so many great ways, I would be excited to rea dit, based just off this logline. Good work. I applaud you.
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When the military quarantines a zombie infested Seattle, a ruthless Vampire and his crew must team with a ragtag band of humans to secure the old church they are trapped in or be overrun.
There a spec floating around that has a big buzz, and it's the same idea. A Zombie movie, but the twist is it's about a Vampire. The story tugs on the heart strings, as the Vampire finds a human he…
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Two teens from rival families fall in love… it doesn't go well.
Sounds like Romeo and Juliet, but with some setting, and maybe a theme, it could be turned into something different.
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A spoiled teen is sent to live with her Grandfather who is the storyteller for his tribe; will she have the worst summer of her life or will she relent and learn about her heritage.
Sounds like a great drama. Touching story of lost youth and culture. It would be fun to write, read, and watch.
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A battle of wills ensues between a preacher and a criminal leader after a gang botches a robbery, escapes into the church and holds the congregation hostage.
Sounds like First Sunday, but deeper.
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When Mouse, the smartest girl in school, and social outcast falls for the head cheerleader, Kat Sanders; She will have to pull every trick in the book to win her, the only trouble, Kat doesn't even know mouse exists… and likes boys.
Love the name Kat and Mouse for this. Great idea. LBGT films are hot right now.
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After the humongous planet destroying meteor vanishes from the sky right before impacting Earth, a troubled priest must help his congregation recover while dealing with the fact, at the moment the destruction of the earth was eminent he denied God.
Some spelling and grammar help... After the humongous, planet-destroying, meteor vanishes from the sky, right before impacting Earth, a troubled priest must help his congregation recover, while dealing with the fact, at the moment the destruction of the earth was…
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“When he discovers his father will be fired as coach if he doesn’t bring home a championship, a popular quarterback must rally his good looking and talented team to beat the scruffy, overachieving, underdogs that, every year seem to defeat them in the final game.”
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Sounds like a good inciting incident and a fun romp. This could play out well as a feature film.
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When a hyper-connected, workaholic single woman swears off the Internet and her smartphone for Lent, her whole life goes to hell in a handbasket.
Socially relevant, good premise, and female driven. Love it.
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When the caregiver of a quadriplegic man realizes he intends to commit suicide in six months, she plots to make him want to live.
I like this one. It deals with a sad issue, but lifts the story into a beautiful place. Simple yet effective logline.
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Boy meets girl. Boy falls in love. Girl doesn’t.
Not enough there to give any hook. I have a logline like this I am working to broaden. Otherwise, it's just the same ol story that's been done 100000000000000 times.
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When a soldier is killed battling space aliens only to be resurrected to fight the same battle again, he must fight and die every day until he learns how to defeat the aliens.
This film was done with Tom Cruise; Edge of Tomorrow. May I suggest changing the antagonists. Set in in a different reality than what has already been done. ?Though, EofT was just a few years ago.
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When an innocent girl enters the kill zone for a drone attack, the mission commander must overcome legal and ethical objections to get permission to execute Kenyan terrorists on the verge of a suicide mission.
I agree with Nir. It's a messed up world we live in, but that's the realism. Otherwise, I like the intertwining?stories. It could be very dramatic and suspenseful.
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When Jacob, a genteel theater actor, becomes a mob boss through mistaken identity. He is forced to work with Mia a police detective, in order to incarcerate the notorious Big Bamzy and save his own life.
This is a logline for the narrative of a 10 episode TV comedy series.
Drop the when, it's not needed, and makes the first sentance ready funky. Unless you add a comma after identity, and lowercase the h in he. Don;t take this the wrong way, this idea has been done time-and-time again. Maybe…
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After his aunt dies, a notoriously obnoxious lawyer will inherit 100 million dollars on the condition that he gets 5000 new friends on facebook within a week without using a computer. Or loose the money to a rival lawyer in charge of her estate.
Very socially relevant. I like the idea and theme. Good stuff. Keep up the great work.
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After his terminally ill and clinically dead bitch of a wife miraculously revives her self, a depressed man must find a way to free himself of his life long commitment.
After his terminally ill(,) and clinically dead bitch of a wife(,) miraculously revives (herself), a depressed man must find a way to (break) free of his life long commitment. Marked typos, and a recommendation, with (), otherwise sounds fantastic.
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When a teenage girl is relentlessly followed by an unknown supernatural figure after a sexual encounter, she must have sex with someone new to stop it from following, and ultimately killing her.
Throw a comma in between figure and after, and you have a great logline. Sounds like a great Cinemax late night film.
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After the king asks him to serve as his advisor, the lord of the North discovers the murder plot of his predecessor as an attempt to cover up the heir’s illegitimate claim to the throne.
Sounds like an interesting logline. I would be interested in reading more.
