Ryan Noyes

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on When Earth is invaded by aliens, A Mafia enforcer must put his vandettas aside, unite the five families and defend the earth the only way he knows how: Violently.

IDENTIFIES THE INCITING INCIDENT. IDENTIFIES THE FUNCTION OF THE PROTAGONIST AND INNER JOURNEY. IMPLIES THE STAKES. BUT THE GOAL IS MUDDLED BETWEEN UNITING THE FAMILIES AND SAVING THE EARTH, WHICH ONE IS MORE IMPORTANT, AIDAN? ALSO 'FIVE FAMILIES' IS SORT…