rockyr

Recent reviews

• on Twenty-year-old vindictive Johnny leaves the reform school, forms a one man army with nature's creatures, and avenges his parents' assassins, the last one being the head of state with impregnable security.

  You don't need to include your protag's name. Unless the protag is a famous person, character names are meaningless and tend to clutter the logline. Better to use a descriptive noun and a well-chosen adjective. This will make the character…

• on A voyeuristic loner becomes convinced he?s being relentlessly stalked by a secret FBI task force out to drive him insane, erase his identity, and frame him for multiple sex-related homicides.

  Thanks for the great feedback jm