quantumpoet

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276 points to Logliner

Loglines

on Three good for nothing youths unexpectedly gain superpowers and must save their crumbling city, YGN, from complete destruction.

The logline is pretty clear but comes across quite generic. Once I read the synopsis I was intrigued, because now I understood what was personally at stake and his knowledge of the future. I think you should distill it into…
on Demoted after a failed coup against Satan, an inept demon is sent to America to create chaos and earn back his honor, but his rival demon’s sabotaging antics turn every mission into a comedic disaster.

I think the logline is good because I really get the concept and the comedy. If you in one word can add the personality or antics of the rival demon to make it more specific, it might create even more…