PeterPan

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• on The ambition of a young woman to be wealthy and own a portfolio of properties is stymied by the sudden death of her husband. But she continues to prioritise her need for success and wealth over the welfare of her teenage stepson. Feeling unloved he contemplates suicide. She is failing to reach her goal. From the tangles, bonds and mixed loyalties they find that success is a shared journey.

  Your time for free holds no generosity if you criticise but not offer constructive help. Think about your motivation for being here, it is not serving you, although it may feed your ego.

• on The ambition of a young woman to be wealthy and own a portfolio of properties is stymied by the sudden death of her husband. But she continues to prioritise her need for success and wealth over the welfare of her teenage stepson. Feeling unloved he contemplates suicide. She is failing to reach her goal. From the tangles, bonds and mixed loyalties they find that success is a shared journey.

  It is difficult to progress the quality of my logline when your reply is a vacuous criticism without specifics. You might start by pointing to some 'great examples' to be found on this website. But even if there are some…

• on The ambition of a young woman to be wealthy and own a portfolio of properties is stymied by the sudden death of her husband. But she continues to prioritise her need for success and wealth over the welfare of her teenage stepson. Feeling unloved he contemplates suicide. She is failing to reach her goal. From the tangles, bonds and mixed loyalties they find that success is a shared journey.

  Thanks for your incisive review. I have rewritten the logline in response to your helpful advice: "Fixated on becoming wealthy, the sudden death of her husband doesn’t stop this woman placing her ambition way above the welfare of her teenage…