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After suffering a season-ending injury in a championship game, a high school star quarterback must decide where to return playing football to earn a lucrative NIL deal, or follow his passion of being a sports video gamer.

February 7, 2023
After acceptance into a new gene-altering program, a nerdy, popular eSports gamer undergoes a risky, unknown side-effects procedure to become a NFL quarterback hoping to win a Super Bowl.

January 28, 2020
After learning his mother is dying due to lack of healthcare coverage and money, a promising med student abruptly quits school to compete in a dangerous TV show offering $1 million to the lone survivor who is still alive at the end of the game.

March 22, 2018
When diagnosed with terminal cancer, a shy gamer has a month to enlist help from her ex-eSports team in order to win an international competition.

May 8, 2017
The international

May 8, 2017
When the only girl he’s ever known is taken away, a boy must escape the robot who bred him in order to find her.

April 15, 2017
Does this sound interesting/openable or too similar to a Christmas carol?

January 6, 2017
After her first love dies, a taxi driver on her way to sign divorce papers is showed what might have been when different versions of her younger self appear as subsequent passengers in her cab.

November 21, 2016
Rescued from a life of bullying and abandonment, a young girl musters up the courage to battle a serpent who is holding her estranged father captive.

November 14, 2016
After learning her mermaid mother has only a week to live, a disfigured teenager must choose between a conniving snake and a vengeful clown, the only ones who know where to find her.

November 8, 2016
When a pregnant schoolteacher learns that her father is the half-man/half-bear who slaughtered her family, she teams up with a transexual scientist to convince the monster in becoming the high school mascot.

October 26, 2016
As she repeatedly travels back to a Georgia in 1815 from Chicago in 2016, a black woman must figure out how to stop time traveling before a ruthless plantation owner ends up killing her.

September 2, 2016
When his teenage son is murdered, a detective hesitated to bring the presumed killer to justice, after learning about their secret love affair.

September 1, 2016
When an impoverished single mom is diagnosed with cancer, her teenage son solicits treatment donations by attempting to break the Guinness World Record for continuous wakeboarding of 12 straight hours.

September 1, 2016
When wakeboarding is announced as an Olympic sport, a gold medal hopeful seeks out training from her disgraced, former champion father.

August 31, 2016
After a popular police officer is suspended indefinitely for shooting a black teen, a desk duty officer seizes his opportunity to be a hero, serving as his town’s only source of law enforcement when the rest of the police force protests by calling in “sick” for a week.

August 23, 2016
When a college student falls in love with wakeboarding while preparing to win the Women?s World Amateur Golf Tournament, she must decide whether to pursue a future of money and stability, or passion and uncertainty.

June 2, 2016
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A father seeks revenge on the internet troll who might have been responsible for his teenage son’s suicide.

May 24, 2016
A single mom, a recent college graduate, and a drifter each have a chance to make 1 out of 10 half court shots for $20 million or spend 2 years in jail.

May 24, 2016

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on In a future post-apocalypse society, where reproduction is only for ?the worthy?, a young woman chosen for reproduction must convince her leaders to spare her life after announcing that she doesn?t want to have children.

There are some other novels/stories that have covered this topic, including the similar The Handmaid's Tale. It got me thinking though: what if the roles were reversed? After a massive world war that kills billions, women come into power and…
on Does this sound interesting/openable or too similar to a Christmas carol?

Son calls off the wedding the night before he's going to get Married... When her son calls off his wedding at the last minute, a regretful, embittered taxi driver must visit her own past, present and future to help him…
on After her first love dies, a taxi driver on her way to sign divorce papers is showed what might have been when different versions of her younger self appear as subsequent passengers in her cab.

After her son's marriage separation, a divorced taxi driver who is full of regret, sees what might have been from past failed relationships, and uses these visions to help repair her son's marriage before it's too late.
on In order to graduate film school, a self-centered student documents his terminally ill father’s attempt to recapture the heart of a former lover, prior to her impending marriage.

What about this approach? After his youngest child graduates high school, a cancer stricken father must track down his one true love before he dies.
on After an injury ruins hisscholarship, a teen jock must must defeat the school genius to win a robotics competition in order to fund his invention that will allow him to pursue his dream of playing college football.

Seems a little far fetched to me...that a non researcher or heavy science person could just magically come up with a solution to say "fixing an ACL tear, a common, but highly scientific procedure." What if the jock sacrifice his…
on After a popular police officer is suspended indefinitely for shooting a black teen, a desk duty officer seizes his opportunity to be a hero, serving as his town’s only source of law enforcement when the rest of the police force protests by calling in “sick” for a week.

MC: young police officer MC flaw: scared of confrontation Action: Violence without police Goal: protect his family
on After a popular police officer is suspended indefinitely for shooting a black teen, a desk duty officer seizes his opportunity to be a hero, serving as his town’s only source of law enforcement when the rest of the police force protests by calling in “sick” for a week.

MC ? white desk cop MC flaw ? afraid of confrontation after he wasn't able to stop his black, pregnant wife's gangbanger relatives from beating him years ago & nearly killing him Inciting incident - a court releases a troublesome…
on After a popular police officer is suspended indefinitely for shooting a black teen, a desk duty officer seizes his opportunity to be a hero, serving as his town’s only source of law enforcement when the rest of the police force protests by calling in “sick” for a week.

After a small-town?mayor orders his police force to "stand down" during a protest that ends violently, a desk cop attempts to prevent most of the department from calling in "sick" out of retaliation for another upcoming demonstration rally.
on When a college student falls in love with wakeboarding while preparing to win the Women?s World Amateur Golf Tournament, she must decide whether to pursue a future of money and stability, or passion and uncertainty.

Thanks Nir! Good suggestions...thoughts: When Hudson Holloway learns that the Women?s division in the Pro Wakeboard Tour has been canceled, she enlists the help of a banned, former champion to train her to win in the Men?s division.
on When a college student falls in love with wakeboarding while preparing to win the Women?s World Amateur Golf Tournament, she must decide whether to pursue a future of money and stability, or passion and uncertainty.

Yes, agreed! Thank you for the insight! Below is a revised concept: After suffering public humiliation and a ban from women?s golf, the one-time phenom helps a female wakeboarder raise funding to bring back a women?s division to the Pro…
on When a college student falls in love with wakeboarding while preparing to win the Women?s World Amateur Golf Tournament, she must decide whether to pursue a future of money and stability, or passion and uncertainty.

How is this revised approach: After being publicly humiliated & temporarily? banned for cheating in the Women's World Amateur Golf Championship, a determined teen enlists the help of a disgraced wakeboarder to win a major wakeboard contest and restore her…
on When a college student falls in love with wakeboarding while preparing to win the Women?s World Amateur Golf Tournament, she must decide whether to pursue a future of money and stability, or passion and uncertainty.

Thoughts on this revision: After she loses her #1 women's world amateur golf ranking, a rebellious college student quits golf to win a wakeboard contest to escape her abusive and controlling father.
on A single mom, a recent college graduate, and a drifter each have a chance to make 1 out of 10 half court shots for $20 million or spend 2 years in jail.

Agreed. I was thinking? a disgraced TV Producer has a final chance to save his career with a pay per view event.? An event that examines the tension between greed and morality. Risk everything (family, life) for a slim, yet…
on A father seeks revenge on the internet troll who might have been responsible for his teenage son’s suicide.

Great feedback all. You guys are fantastic. How's this as a revised logline:To exact deadly retaliation on the cyber bully responsible for his son?s suicide, a father poses a girl on the internet. The father finds himself engaged in a…