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Against a backdrop of growing religious conflict with a foreign civilization, an idealistic scientist seeks truth while a young civil servant seeks power.

August 31, 2015

on Against a backdrop of growing religious conflict with a foreign civilization, an idealistic scientist seeks truth while a young civil servant seeks power.

Thanks, both helpful. "As their city is plunged into religious turbulence and war, an idealistic scientist uncovers its dark past while an ambitious civil servant seeks the power to shape its future."
on Against a backdrop of growing religious conflict with a foreign civilization, an idealistic scientist seeks truth while a young civil servant seeks power.

"Amid religious turbulence and war, an idealistic scientist seeks the truth while a young civil servant seeks power." That's a good question, because I'm struggling to define it. Both are from the same side in the war, but take very…
on A once indulgent father now battles his spoiled children who are stealing his retirement money.

Indulgent of his children, or self-indulgent? One is certainly more sympathetic than the other! I assume 'spoiled children' means the former - but maybe it could be clearer?
on In a dystopian world, a geeky geneticist invents a super-seed to avert global starvation and finds himself pursued by dark corporate profiteers.

I disagree. By reflecting real developments, and then amplifying them to an extreme context, a story can be more engaging precisely because it implicitly comments on real-world affairs. Of course, if the story was then written in a cliched and…
on In a dystopian world, a geeky geneticist invents a super-seed to avert global starvation and finds himself pursued by dark corporate profiteers.

The first and last parts are clear and succinct, but maybe the middle can be tweaked? I would assume a geneticist character to be fairly geeky by default, so what does the description add? Is there a different part of…

Against a backdrop of growing religious conflict with a foreign civilization, an idealistic scientist seeks truth while a young civil servant seeks power.