Odarka

Penpusher · 35 points

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When a film crew is ungrateful on set, a fed up crafty serves up the ultimate revenge.

September 7, 2020

on When the co-worker nobody likes is named boss and turns the office-building into a claustrophobic dictatorship, a soon-to-be-retired pessimist must help his colleagues escape before their co-worker goes all Voldemort on them.

maybe change Voldemort to "berserk" or "ape"?
on A kindergarten teacher, whose only friends are her dog and her students, gets fired and decides to teach her dog how to attack other people so she can get revenge on her boss and be with her students again.

Sounds like an interesting story, but maybe make the logline shorter? When a lonely kindergarten teacher is fired, she trains her dog to exact revenge on her boss.
on When a young grocery clerk who doesn’t give a fuck about most things, witnesses a kidnapping of a child, they have to resort to murder in order to save the young boy.

Maybe rephrase "who doesn't give a fuck about mot things" into a shorter sentence. Perhaps: When a young dispassionate clerk witnesses a kidnapping, he has to commit the ultimate crime of passion - murder - in order to save the…