MichaelG

Penpusher · 226 points

74 points to Logliner

4 loglines
4 reviews

(REVISED) When an antisocial apocalypse ?prepper? is the only person in her small town uninfected by a virus transmitted through the trial of a ?telepathic phone?, she must stop preparing for the world?s end and start saving it.

July 12, 2016
(REVISED) When a single-minded entrepreneur conducts an unauthorised trial of a ?telepathic phone? in a small town and accidentally transmits a virus that makes everyone lose self-control, she must find a cure with the help of the only uninfected person – a technophobic hippy.

June 25, 2016
When an entire town gets a virus from the trial of a brain-activated smart phone, a self-righteous hippy must stop the company and shut down the trial.

April 9, 2016
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When disgraced banker gets a job working as a truck driver for his father and discovers the company?s cover-up of multiple road deaths, he must expose his father?s negligence before someone else dies.

March 23, 2016

on Following a career-defining launch of a state of the art submarine, a high-ranking U. S. government official finds her life turned upside down after she learns that her estranged husband is hunting her.

Although the story is unclear, I like the building blocks i.e.? in spite of her great achievements and in spite of the fact that she works for the most world's powerful military machine, she is a fearful of one man…
on “When he discovers his father will be fired as coach if he doesn’t bring home a championship, a popular quarterback must rally his good looking and talented team to beat the scruffy, overachieving, underdogs that, every year seem to defeat them in the final game.” -Overdogs-

Great idea, with huge comedy potential. My only suggestion is to think about what his internal journey will be (i.e. how the quarterback will change). I don't know if that necessarily needs to be in the logline, but something you…
on Forced out on his own for the first time, a mentally-challenged man with impulse control problems must prove to himself he can overcome his limitations and achieve his dream of a “normal” life.

I like the idea, but agree with most of the comments above that you need to be more specific. I think that you should focus on how he can overcome his limitations. Is there an event, is there something he…
on Dying single father on the run from his criminal past must come to grips with series of choices that led him to commit murder in order to procure a new suitable home for his young son with special needs.

I suggest you be more specific about his inner goal: "must come to grips with series of choices".? Also, it's hard to tell whether the murder occurs in the movie or whether that is the 'criminal past' being referred to.…