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When a young 2.0 human called Uluru meets other humans like him, he must decide if he stays with the pygmy tribe that accepted him as one of their own or leave the tribe searching for a promised land occupied by other 2.0 humans.

October 19, 2021
When a young 2.0 human, created by machines, discovers he is a part of an old project to reintroduce the human species on planet Earth, he travels across the world to be with others like him but is ultimately disappointed with his species.

May 28, 2020
In a post-civilization future, when an old project of reintroducing the human species on Earth is activated, a young 2.0 lonely human travels across the world, to be with others like him, just to end up disappointed with the new civilization being developed.

May 19, 2020
Uluru-Kata (Part Two) When a posthuman boy, trying to integrate into a tribe of pygmies, meets other humans like him, he decides to resume his voyage to the Promise Land with his robot father in order to avoid his species extinction.

October 25, 2019
When a problematic medical student, on probation, discovers a plot to kill the imperial family and overthrow the current galactic dynasty, he offers his services to the mastermind terrorist and falls in love with his daughter while trying to undermine his plan.

February 11, 2019
When a despot king discovers ancient technology that could help him destroy his enemies he is outsmarted by an old digital human that invades his mind with a plan to conquer the real world.

October 28, 2018
When a young man is tormented by the spirit of his dead father telling him his mother will die because of him, he tries to find out more about his death.

October 28, 2018
When a lonely teenager, raised by intelligent machines, dreams they are lying about the extinction of humankind, he decides to run away on a perilous quest to find other humans.

October 20, 2018

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on When a young 2.0 human called Uluru meets other humans like him, he must decide if he stays with the pygmy tribe that accepted him as one of their own or leave the tribe searching for a promised land occupied by other 2.0 humans.

thank you for your help much apreciated Going to check that film best regards
on 250 years after an asteroid impact leaves one side of Earth continually facing the sun, a lone outsider tries to find a new home in an increasingly more hostile world with the help of a physical manifestation of his soul.

Sounds interesting but the soul part needs more info... this asteroid changed something that allowed for the physical manifestation of human souls?
on Strange people in a foreign land with no constitutional rights, these Irish gypsies learn the hard way that the criminal can become the crime victim!

Who is the antagonist and what is his motive?
on A teen mysteriously cured of terminal cancer becomes the centerpiece of a war between supernatural factions that are hellbent on procuring a miraculous, prophetic pregnancy that grows inside of her.

Who is the protagonist? If not the girl you must decide who it will be. The information is all there but the order in which you present your logline could be better. Start with the prophetic pregnancy (inciting incident) and…
on Set in the year 2050: When he wakes up out of his coffin to discover that Transylvania has become an Orwellian fascist state, Count Dracula must lead a rebellion and take them down before they uncover his true identity.

He wakes up out of his coffin, or he wakes up and gets out? How does he end up leading the revolt? If he uses his powers of persuasion people will know who he is... besides he only gets out…
on Stand-alone episodes with a revolving cast determined to enter the psyche of viewers and leave behind irrational, unrealistic, or environmentally triggered fears and an ending that will be anything but happy!

Who's the protagonist? The goal and conflict is not clear. Who are these people? What kind of show is this? Fiction or reality TV? How do they enter the psyche of the viewers? What's the genre?
on A group of sister have a lengthy conversation trying to fill in the social, cultural and physiological blanks about a long extinct species: Humans.

Sounds like a short movie, or a theater piece... Use the plural in sisters... How many sisters? Is this a post-human species or just a group of aliens? Are they organic beings? What is their interest in humans? Are they…
on A driver intent on picking up and murdering a hitch-hiker picks up a hitch-hiker intent on murdering a driver.

Cool. This could work as a comedy as well.
on When his doctor tells him he only has one month to live, a recent grad and his best friend are determined to check everything off of his bucket list.

Don't start with the doctor, start with the protagonist and give a bit more info on this guy. Who is he? Ex.: When a popular recent grad finds out he has just one month to live, he and his best…
on Two cops must stop a drug cartel from unleashing his narcotic on the city before everyone becomes addicted.

...unleashing their narcotic... What kind of narcotic are we talking about and why will "everyone" use it and become addicted? Is it in the food? In the water?
on A group of assassins from around the world race against time in NYC to get to the prize that has the key to stopping bombs that are about to kill them.

Your logline is a bit difficult to read/ understand at first. You should re-write it. Use the formula: When [a major event happens], [the hero], must [do the main action]. Ex.: When a group of assassins finds out they have…
on A high school student inherits supernatural powers and becomes a vigilante as he attempts to save the rainy city of Seattle from becoming a fiery hell.

He inherits his powers? from who? Is he special or was it by luck? What kind of supernatural powers? Why do you say they are supernatural? Why and when does he decide to become a vigilante? Are you aiming at…
on A young teen decides to run away from home in order to escape the abuses from his father.

Is there a mother? Where does he live and where does he go? When does the action takes place? Is it a flashback?
on Logline: A junior level cyber crimes investigator races against the clock to track down a sadistic online stalker before he strikes his next chosen victims, her family.

How does she knows this killer is tracking her family? Finding this should be the inciting incident. What does she do to prevent this? Who helps her? Is she alone in this? Does the family know about it? Why is…
on After his home planet were destroyed by space ronins, the last gun-wielding cyber-samurai must track down and kill an old foe who intends to erase all life and create a new universe using a dangerous alien weapon.

Who helps him? If the old foe has a weapon that can destroy all life surelly there are other people trying to stop him?
on After being sent to the future during a battle, the two warriors fight to finish what they started.

Where and when is the battle? Is it in ancient China, the middle ages Europe, first world war? Is it in our present somewhere in the Middle East? When and where do they go? How they arrive there? Why do…
on After an experiment-gone-wrong leaves a scientist broken and hurt, the scientist looks for a new place and a new life where he can belong.

You should present what goes wrong: is the scientist paraplegic or has he gain some sort of inexplicable power? What's the gender of the scientist?
on A young boy with autism goes to Sicily on vacation and falls in love with a girl.

I agree with dpg, you should add some info about the problems that the protagonist will go through in his pursuit of happiness/normal life. What about the parents of these two children? You should add the boy's nationality as well.
on When several unexplained deaths occur in a retirement village, a cranky veteran suspects the widows and must uncover the truth before becoming the next to go.

The new version is not so good. I would keep the first one but change it a bit. There are war veterans that are young so you should refer to him as a ?cranky old veteran?. Maybe you could say…
on After a new energy source is used to power an entire city, a young cleaning lady is called to protect the city from supernatural threats called Jinn that are attracted to the energy source. The Jinn take over human bodies and give their hosts supernatural powers.

This new energy source of yours has something to do with the Jinns? What I mean is: is there a secret behind this new source of energy? It would be interesting if there was a relation between the energy source…