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A temple virgin uncovers a secret that the high priest would rather conceal: the Day of Atonement isn't working anymore. When he marries her off to a hundred year-old man, she loses everything she's ever known. Now she must find a way to prevent another unjust marriage — and restore the Atonement — before it's too late.
Supernatural fantasy world based on elements in Jewish and Christian legend. No glowing rock-giants though.
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An Alaskan youth goes hunting and falls into the hands of the Iniquisition, whose brutal methods ironically help him discover his faith. Based on a true story.
Around 1815, the Russians and Spanish were competing for Northern California and the sealskin trade there. It's true that the goal shifts in the second act from a physical hunt to a spiritual one as the conflict becomes about faith,…
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When the son of a billionaire couple is kidnapped during their messy divorce, the ransom is an ultimatum: one parent will get to take their son home ? the other must die.
I'd definitely read this. Good job.
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A dog-headed novice leaves his monastery at the command of the elder to capture and tame the remaining mythological beasts which threaten 4th century Jerusalem.
Yeah, it's a fantasy comedy along those lines. The maiden subplot is a love triangle with a twist. I don't want it to veer into spoof, because I lose any chance at true emotion.
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In a world where fictitious characters and mankind co-exist equally, a stressed-out-psychotic film director filming his latest movie, fires, his egomaniacal narrator, a pixy, who purposely sets out to sabotage his movie.
Wouldn't the genre label help establish the fantasy conditions? But hey, any world where different types co-exist equally is a fantasy, IMO. At first, I liked 'egotistical pixy', but then I got to thinking, aren't they all that way? Tinkerbell,…
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A dog-headed novice leaves his monastery at the command of the elder to capture and tame the remaining mythological beasts which threaten 4th century Jerusalem.
Having the head of a dog can be both a blessing and a curse. A dog-headed, etc. That should address the character flaw.
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A dog-headed novice leaves his monastery at the command of the elder to capture and tame the remaining mythological beasts which threaten 4th century Jerusalem.
Whoops, you're right, should be 5th century. The elder is Symeon the Stylite, a legendary saint of that time, and the dog-man, who becomes known as St Christopher the Dog-Headed, teams up with George, the dragon-slayer also of that time,…
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After selling her voice to a wicked Sea Witch, a headstrong mermaid princess has three days to get a human prince to fall for her…or risk losing everything.
The final phrase is so cheesey, but it does up the stakes.
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Minerva works in an orphanage
One night when she is back at work;
She meets a strange figure,
She hides, and stares him have his way,
When she sees him strike a man.
From this day he shall pursue her.
I can't tell what this is about.
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After being framed for the murder of his father, a teen boy growing up in the late 1930's finds comfort in the "Red-Ryder" comic strip. In his adventures he struggles to find his father's murderer, and prove his name is clear.
Is Red Ryder a cowboy? Can you say cowboy adventures so we know what the movie looks like?
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A soldier suffering from PTSD participates in a virtual reality program to rescue a woman from human traffickers with the hopes it'll cure his condition.
Participates is a weak verb and suggests that the task was straight-forward. But it wasn't, right? Virtual reality was just a cover for something else. So a soldier suffering from PTSD gets more than he bargained for when he signs…
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Two rival English football supporters of different classes fall for each other and discover that their ultra-competitive relationship might not survive the football season or their families.
Do they have to be of different classes? That's been done a lot. The unique thing is the footballer rivalry, and the subtle threat that perhaps the other family members would get violent, as though Romeo's family would try to…
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In a world where fictitious characters and mankind co-exist equally, a stressed-out-psychotic film director filming his latest movie, fires, his egomaniacal narrator, a pixy, who purposely sets out to sabotage his movie.
The most exciting word here is pixy (usually spelled pixie), so I'd start with that. When an egotistical pixie threatens to sabotage his latest movie.... You don't have to spell out the fantasy conditions of the world, because just saying…
