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An interracial family adopts a pair of kids with special powers from an orphanage, and sets out to help each of them find their one remaining parent.
Sorry everybody, I got sick from a tooth infection out of nowhere last week that took me. I'm reviewing everything said! Thanks for the feedback!
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Twin sister detectives – who moonlight as vigilante serial killers – get framed for murder by their criminology teacher, who they (now) must outwit to clear their names.
I like Richiev's twist as well.
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After they are wrongfully accused of murder, a street gang struggles to get back to their home turf ? as every rival gang in the city pursues them.
So they're making their way from one part of the city to another?
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An interracial family adopts a pair of kids with special powers from an orphanage, and sets out to help each of them find their one remaining parent.
Originally the story had the government telling them that they had parents alive... but the story- and log line- may work better if they sense their parents as a result of their powers... hm... "Two foster children, upon receiving complex…
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An interracial family adopts a pair of kids with special powers from an orphanage, and sets out to help each of them find their one remaining parent.
Well the idea behind the powers is this.... the government agents were trying to harvest the power of imagination from the children. All of the other children were abducted by nightmares, but the remaining two were able to imagine the…
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An interracial family adopts a pair of kids with special powers from an orphanage, and sets out to help each of them find their one remaining parent.
This was so informative... man... Okay. So, after much thought, what about this? "After gaining special powers from an experimental drug facility, two foster children partner with their adopted family to locate their remaining biological parents, while fighting to evade…
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An interracial family adopts a pair of kids with special powers from an orphanage, and sets out to help each of them find their one remaining parent.
Oh my gosh! I hadn't even realized I did that.
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An interracial family adopts a pair of kids with special powers from an orphanage, and sets out to help each of them find their one remaining parent.
Well the main characters are the two adopted kids. They were experimented on in the orphanage by a rogue government organization which resulted in them getting powers. The rogue org got found out and shut down. The kids got adopted…
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An honorable Mossad assassin must kill his illegitimate daughter, Miss Palestine, before she blows herself up, while advocating global hate at an Israeli-Palestinian peace summit.
Why is him being illiterate relevant to the logline? I believe you were going for a touch of irony. It's there, but I'd rework the first half to make it more pronounced and clear.
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A drug addicted rich kid breaks into an unsuspecting college students parents home who is home from college due to a just diagnoses of severe diabetic. The situation takes a turn for the worse as a hot shot negotiator tries to prove himself rather than save the girl, who falls into diabetic shock slowly as the hostage taker battles withdraw symptoms. The ending of this terrible situation is tragic and carries swift punishment, no one will ever be the same.
It's way too long. I know that right off the bat. Go back to your core ideas and streamline everything. Tell the smallest possible version of your story in a sentence.
