Krispy Kitchen

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When viciously harassed during an online game, reticent Kara befriends a nice-guy who comes to her defence, but as she begins to suspect his dark motives Kara must expose him before the game becomes fatal.

April 26, 2014

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on A bogus spiritualist and an amateur actor hope to con a wealthy woman out of $10,000 by locating her sole heir ? a nephew given up for adoption under shady circumstances ? but find they are in deep water as the nephew turns out to be a kidnapper who?d rather not be found

I'd never call those IMDB one-liners a logline. VERY different purpose! The one-liners are used to sell to an audience whereas a logline is used to sell to a producer. That's my approach anyway.
on After being framed for the murder of his father, a teen boy growing up in the late 1930's finds comfort in the "Red-Ryder" comic strip. In his adventures he struggles to find his father's murderer, and prove his name is clear.

I think this is a very interesting premise for a film. The last sentence could use a little polishing but that's structural rather than conceptual. I'd like to see you incorporate how the comic influences the boys goal/flaw/obstacle as it…
on A troubled man who was kept in a zombie like state for a number of years begins to regain his independance, but as he discovers, freedom is more than just his state of mind.

Hi Lewis - there's something interesting in there... the key problem is lack of specifics I think. When you say troubled, do you mean he had a mental illness? is that why he was kept in a zombie like state?…