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• on When his big brother goes missing in the wilderness, an anxious high-school senior heads into the wild to find him? accompanied by his brother?s ghost

  We could just remove the details of the ghost.   When his brother is goes missing in the wild, an over anxious high schooler teams up with a ghost to find him before it's too late.

• on A crisis manager by day and citizen journalist by night is recruited by a vigilante mob to expose the corporation he is paid to protect.

  A journalist follows a lead from a credible source that claims his father?s corporation has been illegally erasing people?s memories.   So does this imply that by bringing down the corporation, he will lose everything as well? Does he not…

• on A homeless man combating substance abuse dedicates his battle with HIV to his brother who allegedly died in the Iraq war. His efforts are guided and nourished by the unrivaled generosity of a female passerby who seeks to help him out from week to week — but as time grows and grows, so does his reliance on her.

  How about: After the death of his brother, a homeless man fights against his own substance abuse and failing health before it's too late.

• on When a misogynistic Indian husband loses his IT job, he is forced to work in a team reporting to his wife in her organisation, to pay for mortgage. ★ Accepted

  One little thing that may add is to specify what his wife's company is - for example - is it some sort of feminine manufacturing product, or cleaning service or something that would also conflict with his conception of being…

• on On the verge of taking his own life, a detective will have to get back on his feet to investigate the disappearance of his neglected daughter

  What if he had been fired from his job, so no resources? Did the kidnapper send him a personal message - ie is her disappearance his fault from an old case? How old is his daughter?? Why is he suicidal…

• on A social progressive born on the brink of twentieth century America struggles to form and maintain the ACLU throughout the World Wars while coming to terms with his own ethically dubious past

  I love historical stories but this is what I need to know. So he's a 20th century American who creates the ACLU (had to look it up),? but struggles to maintain it because of his past? Because of supremists?? Because…

• on When a talented teenage pianist wins a scholarship to Julliard, he must convince his parents, outlaw militant radicals, to let him come out of hiding and join the normal world.

  So how did he learn piano and how did he audition? Do they just live an isolated life or in a bunker? i like the contrast in worlds though question how they've worked so far. Does he go to school…

• on In order to progress through heaven’s gates,? ghosts must pay penance by returning to earth and helping the people they hurt.

  I was actually thinking more family-like? /tween level. Like bullies going back to help the kids of the people they bullied? by going back to high school. The idea was to empathetic by being forcing them to be like the…

• on After an 18 year-old Russian Jew sends his family to Ellis Island but must remain behind because of the 1924 U.S. immigration quota law, his 5-year journey in Europe and Latin America forces him to come of age and finally dare to cross illegally in El Paso, TX to reunite with his family.

  I guess the focus is on this young man who had to find a way to join his family, with no resources, at a time where Jews were not widely accepted? alone?? It sounds like a great story but I…

• on When a transgender black woman kills a mentally ill murderer, she is put on trial for life, the jury, who vary from rich to poor to caring to prejudiced,? are caught up in a spiral of grey areas – and a case that exposes the increasingly mad world they live in.

  I'm guessing that the transgender description should have some significance or why put it in there. Maybe evidence points to male and transgender person says it's impossible as he/she is a woman. Tell me why that's important in playing out…

• on In a dystopia where emotions are a disease and love is a capital crime, two co-workers struggle to hide their feelings for each other while plotting to escape.

  this sounds very interesting! Where will they escape to? Is it just a country or a place or all of earth? Otherwise, def got my attention.

• on When mining pollutes the water table and the mine closes, a local outback town is left without employment. A local teenage rebel attempts to save the town by setting up a renewable energy company and entice the ?ornery locals to learn a new way of living.

  There's a similar movie based in AFrica where a kid uses the education he could get to design a 'dam' to help his drought village use the water for the plants. I see a similar theme here where a kid…

• on After eviction, a desperate widow departs with her step-kids to seek her ultra-rich ascetic brother, meditating somewhere in the woods of India before [the ticking clock event]

  Sounds interesting but how does someone so poor find someone in another country?? I like the idea of the quest but I guess determining what that reason is will probably help with the ticking clock event. How old are the…

• on After a minor brain injury, a cynical young woman learns she recently made the decision to come forward about a crime from her past; but, unsure if she is up to the task, she must work to find out who she spent the last two years becoming and whether the shoe still fits.

  So would it be safe to assume she's lost her memory and doesn't know what happened in the last 2 years? Does she return to the home she once had to find she's evicted. Does she call family and realise…

• on In an anthromorpic world, a young lion cub Living in his father shadow, decides to create the world?s first diverse sports team. Determined to prove themselves, these outcasts battle against convention and use their differences as strength in a futuristic sport.

  In an anthropomorphic world, a young lion cub, legally forbidden to play <<sport>>??? ?must create a team of other outcast players to prove to his <<sport>> hero father and the government? that cubs deserve to be included. Just a suggestion…

• on A true story, a man jailed twenty-six years for a crime his twin committed fights a choice: exact sweet revenge on his brother or forgive him to be fully and finally free.

  SO question then, he kills his brother and then what? Would he not go back to jail. From my recent viewing of When you see us on Netflix (disturbing but brilliant), when someone is released from prison, a felon, they…

• on A jaded young woman living in a feudal alternate America plots revenge against the duke who killed her father while working as his daughter’s maid.

  Don't worry - it's amazing what you can refine about your story with just the logline and hence why we all do this. :) If the inciting incident happened say 10 years ago,why is she taking the job now? That…

• on 30 years an only child, ?a man is forced to deal with having two brothers and a family past he has never known.

  How does he discover this family? Inheritance, funeral? Did they know about him? What kind of family is it and what situation does it cause for him?

• on After overlooking abuse witnessed years ago, a reserved transfer student contemplates whether he should of when the same abusive individual is his crushes boyfriend, he tries to save her. ★ Accepted

  I think maybe the protagonist was complicit with the violence by keeping quiet as opposed to maybe blamed for it - blamed for not stopping it.? I'm also not sure of the ages. Transfer student indicates to my high school??…

• on LITTLE EIFFEL – The improbable true story of how Gustave Eiffel fought against massive protests, construction fatalities, and structural issues to build the most visited monument on earth – The Eiffel Tower

  Grabbed my attention straight away. My only question is why it was so important for him to build it - why made him keep fighting against the odds to finish it? Pride? Ambition? Passion?