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on A military veteran eagerly tries to start the next chapter of his life but runs into Murphy’s Law at pretty much every turn, testing his resiliency.

Version 2.0: Mostly based on true events, a newly discharged veteran must use his resiliency when faced with challenges involving career hurdles, obstacles at college, and a deceptive roommate.
on A military veteran eagerly tries to start the next chapter of his life but runs into Murphy’s Law at pretty much every turn, testing his resiliency.

This is my first attempt at a log line, so I wasn't sure how descriptive to be of details.? It's (mostly) based on a true story, similar-ish to "The Pursuit of Happyness".? Thanks for the input!
on A hairstylist?s session with a walk-in becomes much more when she begins to suspect the customer is the woman who abandoned her as a baby.

If the current client is a walk-in, perhaps explain why that's significant to the story.? Is the salon appointment-only and the client begged for an exception due to some "hair emergency"?? ?I would also suggest giving an example or two…
on John Wick is on the run after killing a member of the international assassin’s guild, and with a $14 million price tag on his head, he is the target of hit men and women everywhere.

This definitely sounds like an intriguing plot.? Though the 'why' behind the murder implies this is a sequel to a previous film.? ?And $14 million is quite a hefty price tag, so one could infer the deceased member was highly…