Mukul Kandara

Penpusher · 5 points

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on In the aftermath of a school shooting, a victim’s non-athletic father who has given up on life finds meaning in coaching his dead son’s basketball team to the championships.

Glad I could help. One thing I took from dpg's answer above is that ultimately winning or losing doesn't change the fact that life will go on. What will change their lives is if they can come together by sharing…
on In the aftermath of a school shooting, a victim’s non-athletic father who has given up on life finds meaning in coaching his dead son’s basketball team to the championships.

I get a sense of the story that will take place and can see where it's headed but I think the logline can be more succinct, especially when describing the father. Perhaps, changing the event to include a connection to…