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A fraternity of boys from disadvantaged beginnings rise to some of the highest seats of power under the watchful eye of a man determined to break through the 'establishment'.

April 18, 2012
As a series of devastating terrorist attacks are waged on American soil and the citizens of a nation in shock looks to their Government for reassurance, word publicly gets out that one of the embedded terrorists is negotiating a defection directly with the President's wife in return for the violence to stop.

April 15, 2012
When a man's visions of a lover from a past life reveal she may also be alive today, his initial curiosity turns to an all-consuming obsession as he attempts to challenge fate to be with her once again.

April 15, 2012

on A deaf teenage rock cellist struggles to find her musical voice after the death of her mother.

I haven't read the script:) There has to be something more here than just a musical voice - I agree. What guided her voice before the death of her Mother? Maybe her mother was the sole voice of encouragement and…
on "SOMETIMES LOVE" Revised: A man with a checkered past determined to get his life back on track, falls for the woman who saves his life, but her drug addiction and past horrors may jeopardize everything he works for

Maybe this helps: "Discovering her problems may be worse than his own, an ex-con second guesses falling for the woman who saved his life." -Joey
on When a man's visions of a lover from a past life reveal she may also be alive today, his initial curiosity turns to an all-consuming obsession as he attempts to challenge fate to be with her once again.

Thanks Karel and SQM, this exercise has been an eye opener for me. We get so caught up in our stories (in OUR own heads) that the seemingly simple ideas get muddied up with useless and often misleading detail. Your…
on As a series of devastating terrorist attacks are waged on American soil and the citizens of a nation in shock looks to their Government for reassurance, word publicly gets out that one of the embedded terrorists is negotiating a defection directly with the President's wife in return for the violence to stop.

Thanks for both your comments. This script is only outlined at this stage. Your advice helps to take a clearer run at this. -Joey
on When a man's visions of a lover from a past life reveal she may also be alive today, his initial curiosity turns to an all-consuming obsession as he attempts to challenge fate to be with her once again.

It's in the vein of reincarnation, but the driving forcing of the story is in his attempts to find a woman that everyone else believes "doesn't exist" (for obvious reasons). -Joey
on When a famous Italian detective investigates the death of the daughter he didn\'t know he had, he uncovers more than just murder in this small, immigrant, upstate New York town.

I like this. My gut originally was telling me it's too wordy after first read, but the core of the story is strong without little detail - just the way it should be. -Joey