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Penpusher · 194 points

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6 reviews

A crazed sidekick searching for a new villain sets her sights on a mild-mannered journalist with a powerful secret.

October 30, 2019
Back in time

October 27, 2019

on This romantic, sci-fi action fantasy is set in a medieval world where war is common and survival is a daily struggle. The young heroine, Betha must persevere to overcome beasts, barbarians, ice Vikings, mythical creatures, elves and savages throughout the kingdom who all want her head.

Romantic sci fi action series set in the medieval times? That's a tough sell.
on When an 8ft hairy black monster begins following him around and disrupting his life, a lonely divorcee must find a way to get rid of it before it controls his entire existence.

I have to say that I would watch that movie! But I do would like to know what the lovely divorcee has to lose by not having the lonely divorcee disrupt his life. What life? Is the monster terrifying or…
on Back in time

Back in time A hapless financier checks into an exclusive? 5-star hotel in order to woo a billionaire investor, but finds himself haunted by the ghost of a eight year old girl shrieking to be taken back ?home?. Terrified of…
on When a young assassin discovers a conspiracy that could destroy the very nation she swore to serve, the hunter becomes the hunted when she becomes the target of the organization that raised her.

I think I agree with the two responses. But mine is more of a knee-jerk response. Its too generic and much like what you see in a typical YA - chosen one installment. Good luck.
on A journalist quits his job to write a book about a woman he’s become infatuated with – a reclusive movie star, unwilling to give him the truth.

A nice premise but it lacks enough conflict to make it more compelling. What truth is compelling? Is that the reason she is reclusive? In what way is she unwilling?
on When a ambitious young Egyptian princess wanting to be a warrior, is tired of her title being the only thing she stand for she embark on a journey to prove to her village and father she is capable of saving them from the horrors of demon king Lord Orthius that is bent on revenge

It's a nice premise but a tad derivative. Maybe add something that will give the plot a little more oomph. Right now, it seems Scorpion King-esque.