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on The scorned stepchild of a serial killer is pushed to the limit when his stepfather turns on the family and neighbors for what he perceives as their roles in the death of his biological son.

New and still learning...the event/call to action is great and the strongest part of this log line.? The action/response "pushed to the limit" may need to be more clear.? Nice start.? Hope this helps.
on Johnny Bando, a Japanese Elvis impersonator, collides with Randy North, a small town sheriff tasked with modernizing his office and his band of tripper happy deputies.

Although I like the names and get a sense of their personalities, I'd keep them out of the logline.? When I first read "modernizing his office" I thought of an interior design makeover.
on After his wife of 48 years asks for a divorce, an eccentric old codger embraces single life and modern dating in the search for a new girlfriend.

This would be funny for sure.? ?Why do I want this old codger to find love...what's at stake if he doesn't?
on With 11 days left until the election, a political spin-doctor recruits a Hollywood producer to stage a phony war in order to distract voters from a presidential sex scandal.

Interesting.? So who is the primary protagonist...the spin-doctor or the producer? Staging a phony war seems like a HUGE effort to distract people from sex scandal.? Would a war have distracted us from the Clinton/Lewinsky scandal?? What are the stakes…