jacksparrow

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• on When his brother returns after 12 years with the mob on his trail, a shrewd farmer must find a way to take them all out first, whatever the cost.

  I don't find this logline interesting except the fact that the protagonist is a?farmer. That too if he somehow uses his farming skills to take out the mob, it will be relevant. Or the idea is to show that he's…

• on When a stranger?s corpse tells her he?s an unsolved murder victim, an impetuous journalist must follow his clues and unmask the killer for the story of her career.

  It feels weird that a 'corpse tells' her his story. Does that mean corpse talks to her? If so, it'd have to be either a zombie or a ghost. In that case, you might as well use the actual term.…

• on When a self-described ?monster? is released from prison after 25 years, he must confront his past and modern America on the 2000 mile trip home with his only friend for company; the person who betrayed him. That?s me.

  Released after 25 years, a monstrous prisoner must take two thousand mile trip home touching upon the people and places from his?past with the only friend?he has who betrayed him.

• on A special unit must survive against civilians that have turned into flesh-eating demons on a moving train that was hit by a strange meteor and get to the engine room before it crashes.

  When a meteor hits a moving train, a special unit onboard must fight through the passengers turned into zombies and get to the engine room before train crashes.

• on VERSION A: “Consumed by fear of his impending mortality, a 31-year-old man race against time to break an ancient curse that kills all males in his lineage by age 32.” VERSION B: “A 31-year-old man races against time to break an ancient curse that kills all males in his lineage by age 32.”

  "A man must break an ancient curse within a year if he and his lineage want to live beyond the age 32."

• on When society devolves into chaos after the electric grid collapses, an immoral celebrity survivalist leads a group of defrauded fans to defend his remote compound from a ruthless gang of killers who are out to kill him and his family.

  In my opinion, "?must lead a group of fans to the safety of his private compound " sounds specific?and limiting. It may be good if how they survive is left for the imagination.

• on When Jack saw a dream that his only daughter killed by a boy ?jack try to find and kill that boy?

  To save his daughter, a?father must find the boy who killed her in his dream.