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on (TV) Dangerous Exploits follows a young man's journey from a womanizer to a brilliant sociopathic manipulator, starting with his graduate studies of psychology at Arizona State University.

Ok, your protagonist is obvious, the young man, but what is his goal(s) that he is trying to accomplish? Is it to become a "brilliant sociopathic manipulator"? And what/who is the antagonist that he must overcome? What is the conflict…
on Families struggling with the threat of foreclosure are offered sustainable options to stay in their homes when socially-responsible investors crowdfund to buy their mortgages.

I agree with Louise Weihart, you need to focus your logline on a main character (your protagonist) and his or her goal(s); but you also need to include the antagonist(opponent) that your main character must overcome to reach that goal.