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on Suicidal and desperate for death, a young man travels to a house to remove the one element in his life that keeps him going so he can have his death wish fulfilled, his brother.

I am a little new to advise on log-lines. This one was a little confusing prior to reading your response to -dpg- as to the actual goal of the story. I also think that saying he's Suicidal and desperate for…
on Dwayne Townsend, a local rapper/producer struggles to find his way through a neighborhood infested with drugs and temptation, but after his friend is fatally shot and he changes his life, he?s forced back into his old life and has to decide, take a life or save one.

Thanks for your comment, heres another version. Dwayne Townsend, a local rapper/producer struggles to find his way through a neighborhood infested with drugs and temptation, but after his friend is fatally shot and he changes his life, he's forced back…