Houston Chorley

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• on ?When an inexperienced journalist gets assigned to a military unit fighting in the second US civil war, he will have to fill the unlikely role of diplomat in order to prevent the war from reaching his home town.?

  I like the idea sounds very cool. When the whole country is at war. How do you give the home town higher stakes.

• on When a Hercules bank plane crash lands in the desert, a young experienced gunslinger and his brothers must battle against an assortment of mercenaries down a long desert road to get to the money first before the military arrive.

  ok. So I had a thought. If we give him meaning.. so his brother is the surviving pilot and must be rescued. When an armoured supply plane containing millions crash lands in a post apocalyptic desert, A young and innocent…

• on When a Hercules bank plane crash lands in the desert, a young experienced gunslinger and his brothers must battle against an assortment of mercenaries down a long desert road to get to the money first before the military arrive.

  Well it's post apocalyptic, so the desert could be any where in the world it all seems the same at the moment. If investors are asking it's in America. The idea of the hercules was to give the plane some…

• on In 'Found Photos' style, a pair of Google Street View car drivers unknowingly take a photo of a dangerous cult performing a ritualistic killing in a remote field and are pursued by them. Detectives are left with an abandoned car and a series of mysterious photos in order to find the pair before it's too late. (Inspired by these types of lists – http://www.viralnova.com/creepiest-things-on-google-maps/

  it seems like you have two protagonists. The cop which makes it a crime thriller. The driver which makes it a horror if the majority of the script is about escaping. When a driver for google maps uncovers a cult,…

• on Renee must convince her group to stick to the plan in a future reality show where people die and the only reward is survival.

  Sounds very much like hunger games. What is your Inciting incident? Who is Renee? These will give it more personality then just being the run of the mill dystopian reality show. Remembering that battle royale, running man, the condemned, gamer…

• on When an out spoken video gamer returns home to care for her injured father. She must enter into and win a video game tournament to keep her fathers farm.

  Hi Nir, I think the Inciting Incident is the father's stroke, because with out the stroke she doesn't return home and there is no need to save the farm. Her major character flaw: is her inability to lead. She must…

• on When an out spoken video gamer returns home to care for her injured father. She must enter into and win a video game tournament to keep her fathers farm.

  When a video gamer returns home to care for her estranged bedridden father, She must gather a team of misfits to win a video game tournament to save her father farm from foreclosure.

• on When an out spoken video gamer returns home to care for her injured father. She must enter into and win a video game tournament to keep her fathers farm.

  Hey guys thanks for the critiquing The idea in my head at the moment is. She has been separated for her father through divorce. He has a stroke that injures him and thats what makes her come back to care…

• on When the troubled son of a wealthy business CEO falls into heavy heroin abuse, he is taken care of J05HU4, an A.I. who is to help his son come off his heroin addiction only to relate to him during his withdrawals that evolves J05HU4 in the process.

  So I see the MC as the Son so why not. "The wealthy heir" or " A rich heroin addict must kick his habit with the help of Jo5hu4.... I suppose the Inciting incident must be where he crosses the…

• on After a series of strange events, a young woman concludes that she is a witch with magical powers. Against her will , her family pushes her to undergo psychiatric treatment.

  Sounds quite interesting. Maybe a "series of Supernatural events" might suffice, I know what Richiev is saying but because it is a series of events it starts to becoming a cluttered logline.

• on A small town shearer incapable of change, falls in love with an Italian backpacker unable to settle down, struggle to stay together as their love florishes.

  When a small town shearer incapable of change falls in love with a european backpacker unable to settle down. He must fight to keep her, only to realise must go out in to the world to really find her.

• on A small town shearer incapable of change, falls in love with an Italian backpacker unable to settle down, struggle to stay together as their love florishes.

  Hi DPG, That's correct on both fronts. Robbie fears failure of leaving a small town, He has a secret passion for photography, which plays a big role later on in the film. but he covers the fear up with excuses…

• on A small town shearer incapable of change, falls in love with an Italian backpacker unable to settle down, struggle to stay together as their love florishes.

  Thanks for the feed back guys. I took your thoughts on board. An tried a different approach. Robbie a small town shearer in capable of change, begins to struggle with his role on the family farm and rural life while…