Will Hare

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on After her brother is gunned down by a notorious Hispanic gang, a young woman grows up to become an undercover detective and infiltrates the deadly gang to bring them to justice.

Or how about : A (maybe put an adjective here) female detective goes undercover to infiltrate the gang that brutally murdered her brother. Sorry, I don't meant to be writing your loglines, so ignore it if it encroaches on your…
on A couple find they are better in bed than in a serious relationship and seek the help of professionals, friends and family to make their troubled relationship work.

This sounds too generic, meaning it fits way to many movies in this genre. You have to find the "hook" that makes your story different than all the others.