HannahB

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on When she allows her husband’s overdose, a neglectful young mother must embark on a journey of recovery or risk losing her children to the system forever.

I would suggest adding urgency or a timeframe for losing her children.? Like a court date or an order from the court.
on A talented lonely man falls in love with his soulmate but everyday fighting brings out her past and his imaginary future.

I'm assuming" her past" means she had a traumatic past? Is that the conflict. Because of her past they can't achieve the future he has envisaged? If this is the case then maybe it's her story. She needs to overcome…