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A compulsive liar turns into a werewolf exactly 22 minutes after knowingly giving false information.
Why a werewolf and why 22 minutes?
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A con artist hustles a family into spending Christmas with him, but his masquerade is threatened when his real family moves in next door
Why does the con artist hustle a family into spending Christmas with him when he can spend it with his real family?
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After a morally upright young adult is saved by a beautiful vampire from an attack orchestrated by his uncle to eliminate opposition to his rule, they work together to track down his newfound relative: the leader of the Vampire Hunters, but when the vampire gives herself up to save him, he must embrace his own inner darkness to rescue her before she is executed.
Is his uncle the newfound relative?
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The son of a Nigerian Genocide warlord moves in with a Suburban American family to fulfill his fathers dying wish but the secrets of his old and new family threaten to send him back home to a life of psychological imprisonment.
I like the first half of this but I'm lost when you add 'life of psychological imprisonment'. Why would his life be like that?
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After having a freak accident during a baseball game, high school students must use their superpowers to stop their enemies from invading their town.
I think the freak accident thing is overplayed. Also, were there enemies before the freak accident or did they just randomly show up?
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After his wife and childhood dies unexpectedly from an illness, a Marine gains the ability to time travel so that he can remember all the times he spent with her.
I like where this is going but I think there needs to be more.
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To fund her tuition to become a pilot, a small-town girl joins forces with a closely guarded circle of elite air hostesses to smuggle blood diamonds from Sierra Leone, only to discover the seductive world of the criminal rich. She is forced to overcome the alluring alpha of the clique, before she becomes one of them. [Title: Diamond in the Rough]
I like this.
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When a naive teenager and her older sister, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party? that secures a recording contract and launches them into show business. They head to Manchester to work the cabaret circuit only to discover that the rock’n roll lifestyle is a roller coaster ride of extreme highs and tragic lows.
I would take off the first word in this and 'who argue over everything'.
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When his family is terrorised by the ghost of a killer, a man sets out to confront the ghost, an old foe, bent on avenging his death.
Wow! Personally I don't watch horror but if something less scary then I'd watch it for sure.
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Liberal Cardinal Bergoglio tries to convince Pope Benedict XVI to accept his resignation, unaware the conservative pontiff is sizing up his harshest critic to lead the Catholic Church after his shock departure.
I feel like this needs rewording. It's hard to get past the 'Frustrated and liberal' part. It is important to say both of things together like that? Maybe just put 'frustrated'.
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When a sacred family heirloom goes missing, a devoted widow is stalked by a deranged young woman who believes that she took the emblem and she viciously sets out to retrieve what might be rightfully hers.
This sounds like a thriller. Maybe take out 'she viciously' because she's described as deranged so one would think that she's already going to go about it in a crazy and/or scary way.
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Convinced by a gimmicky sweepstakes letter that he?s won $1,000,000, a booze-addled old man talks his skeptical son into driving him 800 miles to Lincoln, Nebraka to claim his prize.
I like this. I'd watch it.
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When Cameron learns that her husband?s impromptu vacation to Barcelona is just a way to get away from his educationally gifted children, Cameron has no choice but to be mother and father for her children who are struggling to fit into an elite suburban society.
On the guide about writing loglines here you don't use a person's name.? The thing that I find interesting is that the kids are educationally gifted. This could be a comedy if you can spin it right.
