grachamoncha

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Twenty years after the unexplained disappearance of five children, a grubby private investigator and his straight-laced daughter get tangled up in the case, taking on the mob, decade old secrets and the gritty underworld of 60's America.

July 7, 2015

on When his research lab risks beign shut down, a passionate scientist and his nerdy intern build a believable fake AI, but they need to pass a series of tests to be taken seriously while unscrupulous corporations want to take possession of the invention.

Use of the word "very" is interesting. Is it intentional, as it feels like you are trying to draw the readers attention to that fact. "Builds" should be, "build" in my opinion. In terms of the final line, "they're under…