gracee98

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on Gripped by mid-life crisis a 46 year old teacher decides to try an adventure holiday and learns the importance of life on the bloodied streets of Kathmandu.

I agree that the conflict needs to be clearer... Also because you've mentioned that it's a mid-life crisis there is no need to specify age. Instead a description of the teacher (inhibited, shy, spirited, British, Hungarian...) would help us understand…
on Arrogant postman of the year fights to keep his pride, when he comes across a stubborn mailbox that won?t accept his mail.

This feels like a logline for a short, is that the intention?