George Tsounis

Penpusher · 24 points

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When he forgets a new drug at a police officer’s house, a clumsy teenage drug-dealer must retrieve the stash and deliver the substance to an ex-chemist to replicate it.

July 1, 2020

on A wealthy oblivious drawing artist raised by animals unfreezes a painted river to stop his artistic ego from not seeing his forest-dwelling family before he moves away from home.

What is the event? the event has to happen to the protagonist. also try sticking to the formula, state the event then the character and then the action, it gives the reader a clearer understanding of what the story is.
on After killing her abusive husband, a desperate woman avoids detection by destroying the evidence, will this clandestine, gory and surreal mother-daughter journey be exposed by the ex-cop next door?

You should avoid leaving a logline open ended, and stick closer to the intended formula of a logline, for example using when, A, must