gawebster

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299 points to Logliner

on A woman possessed by self-interest and greed, becomes architect of her own demise. Her grasp for power and money engulfs her in a web of sex, murder and corruption.

Revised this to read as follows - welcome feedback: A powerful woman using all available assets to control people to increase her wealth, learns at her cost her assistant has greater ambitions, and a real flair for corruption and murder.
on A woman possessed by self-interest and greed, becomes architect of her own demise. Her grasp for power and money engulfs her in a web of sex, murder and corruption.

Thanks yes does help. Will rework with your comments in mind. Appreciate the feedback.
on When an elderly man sues a large bank for foreclosing on him due to a data error, he dies of a heart attack in court, and his daughter then brings a wrongful death suit against the same bank.

Maybe develop the error into something more critical to the banks very survival that they want hushed up. Otherwise unfortunately I would struggle to understand why the bank would give a damn.
on When a female book editor visits the home of a horror writer she finds that all of his creations are holding him hostage.

revision of your initial logline A book editor visits the home of a horror writer where she finds his creations are holding him hostage. Shorter and more to the point :) But if you can add a few words as…