Gabrielle Pickle

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on Ella, a conservative palliative care nurse falls madly in love with her fiances cousin Maddy, a young tattooed musician who, after her mothers sudden death, has returned to her home town and disapproving family.

I feel like you have the details focused in the wrong place... do we need to know her job title or age? What is the main thing that we need to know about this heroine? Is she conservative to a…
on 4 words: Bears. Beats. Battlestar Gallactica

I completely agree with Karel - you can grab attention in a handful of words, but you haven't yet convinced me that there is a 2-hour movie worth sitting through. Show me the hero, the villain and the conflict -…
on A young couple meet and fall in love in a future where a mutated HIV virus means a mere touch can lead to instantaneous death.

The way you currently have it written, the logline has this overwhelming sense of doom. I don't really want to see the movie about two lovers who can't be together. We need to believe that they can overcome the odds,…