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After gaining superpowers, a group of clumsy and incompetent young adults set out to become the world?s first supervillains, but must first gain control over their city from the corrupt, but powerful superheroes who protect it.
The corrupt heroes are not villains, they just aren't good people. What i mean is that they are not protecting the city out of the goodness of their heart, but because they are getting paid to do it and would…
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After taking human form, getting married, and having a child of his own, the ancient child eating (though newly reformed) Boogeyman must protect his oblivious human family when he suspects a new monster may lurking under the bed of his son….planning to out the horrible secret of his past life.
I like that revision, but I thought it should be important to note in the log line that 1) the boogeyman has turned human and 2) his human family are unaware that he was the boogeyman and that he has…
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After being a turned into a djinn by an evil wizard, a young trickster must hunt the man down after being trapped for a thousand years and get him to reverse the curse before his new master uses his three wishes to take control of the world.
As far as I am working the story now, the boy was a selfish a-hole who decided to sneak into the wizards home and steal his magic to use to takeover the kingdom. The wizard, being a bit of an…
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Armed with the power of a legendary Trident from another world, a soft-spoken teen must battle against the wrath of an aquatic alien species as well as that of his best friend, all who whom seek the Trident for their own purposes.
Story began in 2003 finished at the end of that school year in 2004. So yes, I already had this before I had even heard of Percy Jackson (I didn't know about the book until 2007 and didn't even become…
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Armed with the power of a legendary Trident from another world, a soft-spoken teen must battle against the wrath of an aquatic alien species as well as that of his best friend, all who whom seek the Trident for their own purposes.
I completely disagree. I wrote this as a complete story way before that book was ever in published and beyond the fact they both have Tridents (actually, does Percy even have a trident? I know he had one in his…
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Armed with the power of a legendary Trident from another world, a soft-spoken teen must battle against the wrath of an aquatic alien species as well as that of his best friend, all who whom seek the Trident for their own purposes.
With the power of the Trident he can use it to find answers. Through the course of the story, he finds out that his father A.) Isn't his dad and B.) is from another world altogether. Though the Trident has…
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Armed with the power of a legendary Trident from another world, a soft-spoken teen must battle against the wrath of an aquatic alien species as well as that of his best friend, all who whom seek the Trident for their own purposes.
They are individuals, yes, but they do have a "Queen" who is giving the orders per se. There is one of their kind who will connect with the hero and try to reason with him to give up the trident,…
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Following a high school reunion a man seeks forgiveness from a childhood sweetheart who he wronged 15 years prior. She however has plans for revenge and will stop at almost nothing to ruin his perfect life.
Can't a story have two protagonists? (genuine question, sorry if it sounds sarcastic)
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After committing a series of brutal rapes, a young man must conceal his crimes when he supernaturally begins to feel the physical pains of one of his surviving victims…. His pregnant best friend.
The audience (hopefully) wouldn't watch to see an unrepentant rapist suceed, they wouldn't watch to sympathize with him or root for him. The exact opposite. You would want to see justice prevail, to see him get EXACTLY what he has…
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After committing a series of brutal rapes, a young man must conceal his crimes when he supernaturally begins to feel the physical pains of one of his surviving victims…. His pregnant best friend.
He?s not an anti-hero. He is just a villain protagonist. His goal is to keep everyone from finding out it was him who commited the crimes. The antagonist could be considered his best friend, she?s the reason he starts to…
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After committing a series of brutal rapes, a young man must conceal his crimes when he supernaturally begins to feel the physical pains of one of his surviving victims…. His pregnant best friend.
The protagonist is the rapist
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Following a high school reunion a man seeks forgiveness from a childhood sweetheart who he wronged 15 years prior. She however has plans for revenge and will stop at almost nothing to ruin his perfect life.
This sounds really interesting. I think this can be made I to a single sentence: "Following a high school reunion, a man seeks forgiveness from a childhood sweetheart who he wronged 15 years prior, however she has plans for revenge…
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In a futuristic world, high school sports star, Michael, is thrust into spiritual danger when a supernatural force seeks to drive him to fame…but at a deadly cost. Seeking help from the most unlikely source, a new family in town, Mike learns they may be hiding a secret of their own.
The title refers to two things. One having to do with the family, the other having to do with why the supernatural entity is targeting this particular person. It was the only title I can come up with that made…
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Trying to clear a debt, a sport gambling lawyer has three days to locate what is believed to be a non-existent object while avoiding a watchful detective.
We'll this sounds interesting... It definitely makes me want to know more. I don't think you would necessarily have to reveal what the object is. It could be a major twist or something. I've never seen Pul Fiction (and I'm…
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When disobedient space peacemaker reveal hellish plan wealthiest clans on the planet and space invaders to eliminate the excess population of the planet, has again breaks all the rules in order to save the human race and the human woman he loves.
"The nuances of the grammar make it pretty clear that English is not the native language. Go easy on Babaroga." Understood, i didn't intend any offence - my intention was to respond to the logilne as presented. This is how…
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The unforgettable true journey of Alice Paul from Quaker childhood to leader of the battle for women?s equality under the constitution, from Suffrage to the Equal Rights Amendment.
Hi KellieMcK, This seems pretty clear to me, I think you could condense it further. From: "...to leader of the battle for women's equality under the constitution," To: "...to embattled leader for women's constitutional equality" Which got me thinking you…
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When disobedient space peacemaker reveal hellish plan wealthiest clans on the planet and space invaders to eliminate the excess population of the planet, has again breaks all the rules in order to save the human race and the human woman he loves.
Hi Babaroga, I had some difficulty with the sentence structure, I found it quite cumbersome to read and I couldn't quite understand what is going on in your story. Right now it (almost) reads like this to me: "Disobedient space…
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Heartbroken from the loss of his son, a photographer heads out to the beach to snap shots of a sunset with his Canon EOS 600D until he is bashed by a group of Youths who steal the camera and film their exploits out in the City of Sydney… With the footage of his son's funeral still saved on the camera.
Hey Caleb, Okay, got it and it sounds like you're taking it in a good direction.
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Heartbroken from the loss of his son, a photographer heads out to the beach to snap shots of a sunset with his Canon EOS 600D until he is bashed by a group of Youths who steal the camera and film their exploits out in the City of Sydney… With the footage of his son's funeral still saved on the camera.
Hey Caleb, The questions below are largely rhetorical - you don't need to answer them here but they could help you clarify and focus your logline. Regarding the goal, think about where your protagonist starts - he's a heartbroken guy…
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When an experiment in time travel goes wrong, a scientist must decipher exactly who or what has come back before the military move in and destroy would could be be the key to unlocking the secrets of the universe or our damnation.
Hello Matt, Here's my thoughts from your logline: What kind of scientist? Male, female, happy, sad, crazy, ingenious, government, civil etc., you get the idea. We need some idea who the protagonist is beyond a profession. Is this to be…
