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Updated: The editor of a newspaper in a small city begins printing fanciful stories to sell more papers; in the process, she stumbles on to a genuine corruption scandal with national implications.
Yeah, I wondered about that - salacious gossip. Living in Sydney but coming from Adelaide, I was actually thinking of a place the size of Newcastle or Bendigo. Not really 'small towns'; large enough to be anonymous but small enough…
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updated: In a world of high fantasy, four archetypical adventurers have a brush with death only to learn their fates are determined by a ?role playing game?; they journey into our world, where the laws they know no longer apply, to meet the godlike beings who control them (comedy).
Yeah, I think the word 'must' is confusing.
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Reluctantly elected as president, a lazy teenager struggles to run the model train club, but soon discovers opportunities to expand his earnings and popularity through increasingly unscrupulous business practices.
Yes, I agree with these comments. I think it's a really compelling premise, but there are a couple of logical inconsistencies about the protagonist's character. Maybe rather than 'struggles', it should be 'is forced to'?
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When a disgraced former marine is confronted by his wounded daughter, he must protect her from his former clandestine employers who want to use him to kick start an old MKUltra programme
I feel that the elements in this are all exciting, but there are lots of gaps, which can I found a bit overwhelming. Perhaps consider breaking it down a little and spreading those concepts out? e.g.: A (adjective) (profession) is…
