Darrin Nightingale

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RESUBMISSION: When the government embarks on a genocidal programme against junkies, a self-righteous policeman battles to save his drug using sister.

November 24, 2012
When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.

November 14, 2012

on RESUBMISSION: When the government embarks on a genocidal programme against junkies, a self-righteous policeman battles to save his drug using sister.

I use the term junkies because it is more often than not it is used as a derogatory way to describe anyone who take illicit drugs. The government in the story views anyone who takes drugs as junkies. I use…
on RESUBMISSION: When the government embarks on a genocidal programme against junkies, a self-righteous policeman battles to save his drug using sister.

As I understand it, genocide means "the deliberate killing of a large group of people, especially those of a particular ethnic group or nation." Perhaps a more concise articulation of the governments intention is to say that the government is…
on When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.

Thanks for your input but your ideas take the story in a completely different direction. My story basically forces a prohibitionist to experience the cruelty of prohibition and deals with the outcome of that experience. The protagonist's self-righteousness is a…
on When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.

The story deals specifically with illicit drugs. The insects are genetically engineered to eat drugs. A different insect for each drug. The pathology of the insects involve the drug users in their reproductive cycle. Basically the insects are released. Feed…
on When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.

I agree with everything you said but didn't really see it so clearly until you pointed it out. The phrases "risks everything" and "tyrannical forces of prohibition" are, as you said, generic and unnecessary. Taking on board your advise to…
on When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.

I thought I was being concise until I read your version. I like the sparseness. Part of me has been afraid to be that essential. But, as your version eloquently illustrates, sparseness is the name of the game with log…
on When a madman tortures an entire school to hold a young girl captive, in order to save her, her father must uncover the vaccination plot responsible for his sister's death.

I'm with cynosurer. It's very confusing. You need to tell us who the main?character is? What does he desire; what does he want? We also need to know his?antagonist; who is he fighting? I take it from what is written…
on As the ghost of a young man lingers in his apartment, he gradually transforms into a vengeful, evil spirit as he gets more and more jealous of his roommates' lives and becomes convinced that they are starting to forget him

I like the idea of a ghost hanging around his apartment. Sounds a little like the ghost from Being Human http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1349938/. But I'd like a hint as to why. Feel you need to give us an indication of his desire.…

RESUBMISSION: When the government embarks on a genocidal programme against junkies, a self-righteous policeman battles to save his drug using sister.

When the government release swarms of drug eating insects to kill the junkie population a self-righteous policeman risks everything as he struggles to save his drug using sister from the tyrannical forces of prohibition.