Dario Tinoco

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A solitary man unable to sleep for 15 years survives by recording everything he sees and playing it back to differentiate between reality and hallucinations, until he becomes the only witness of a multi million dollar crime and every single person wants to alter his reality.

June 14, 2015

on the seven deadly sins come to earth in human form. Than decide to compete for the soul of a novice priest with his destruction being the ultimate prize.

cool concept, however i would make it clear the novice priest is the protagonist.. "... a novice priest must avoid corruption when the seven deadly sins come to earth in human form and wage for his soul".
on A solitary man unable to sleep for 15 years survives by recording everything he sees and playing it back to differentiate between reality and hallucinations, until he becomes the only witness of a multi million dollar crime and every single person wants to alter his reality.

It is a sci fic in terms that the condition is nonexistent. its a medical trial gone wrong, this person survives thorough a lot of medications and isolation from the world. now his brain has had too many toxins and…
on A solitary man unable to sleep for 15 years survives by recording everything he sees and playing it back to differentiate between reality and hallucinations, until he becomes the only witness of a multi million dollar crime and every single person wants to alter his reality.

Thanks guys, How about this? When a man with narcolepsy who struggles to tell reality from hallucinations witnesses a bank heist, he must remain sane as the thief seduces him trying to alter the evidence that resides deep in his…
on When a unwilling farmer is killed his son is devasted, but when a unsanctioned genetic bug is unleashed he will have till the next crop to find a cure.

seens the first bit has no relation to the second bit. how can a farmer be unwilling ?
on When a tafe teacher learns of a new government order he is suspicious, but when his girlfriend is kidnapped by aliens he must rescue and reverse the effects.

why is it important that is a tafe teacher ? and what is he suspicious about, reverse the effects, which effects ?... is the kidnapping by aliens suppose to be a reveal or is it in the inciting incident ?

A solitary man unable to sleep for 15 years survives by recording everything he sees and playing it back to differentiate between reality and hallucinations, until he becomes the only witness of a multi million dollar crime and every single person wants to alter his reality.